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01/24/08
Wow. Some really tense moments there! I'm glad nobody died though, I really wanted to know if Simon would learn his lesson there. I liked the names you gave the boats, "The Mermaid" and "Sea Hawke" very descriptive piece! ^_^
A lesson well learned, and very well described. Nice imagery here and lots of action... an enjoyable read.
01/27/08
Loved this adventure. The confidence of youth got me in trouble more than once, so I can relate to Simon. Great descriptions of the action. Great ending, too.
01/28/08
There's great depth in this piece, and I love how you didn't preach at the end.
01/28/08
This is very visual, and it reads like a scene from a movie. I could practically feel the salt spray. Perfect interpretation of the proverb.
This is suspensful and very well written. You've captured the topic well. Love your descriptions. A great read.
Good stuff Chrissy! I love this type of story. Adventure... trouble... rescue. Fitted the topic perfectly.
01/29/08
Wow! So much action, even thougth it's a short article. I was 'engulfed in the story, it was so enjoyable to read. This would make a great novel.
Wonderful writing!
This is expertly written. I was glued to my computer, hanging on each word. You must really know about sailing/fishing. I don't, but this seemed completely authentic. A+. Bravo.
01/29/08
This was quite an adventure to experience. You put me right there, but not as the whale. I'm sea-sick now.

The ending of your piece was in the perfect spot.
Right on topic! Great story. I liked the choice of names, too. Matched well with the fishing scene. :-)
01/30/08
Your story felt very authentic and had great pace. It kept me hooked (*groan) to the end.
01/30/08
Great writing, you really had me going with all the suspense there.
This definitely read as if it was a fisherman's manifesto. Super job dear friend!
01/30/08
Great sensory details and rising tension. Terrific application of the proverb.
01/30/08
Chrissy, good for Norm! This is a very good, adventurous story. I love it! The descriptions (very keenly done) and the characterizations are top-notch.
This one would be a winner for me if I were a judge. So original, exciting, and on-topic.
This definitely had me captivated. That was a lesson that boy would not too soon forget.
Your story captivated me from the title to the last sentence. All I can say is "please continue with this story.... I want more!"
Wow! This is fast-paced and gripping. Excellent story with a great meassage.
01/30/08
You do an excellent job of naming the boats, but my first reaction as I started reading was that Simon was well named. He sounds so much like my Simon.
Great job drawing the reader into the story. I agree, I want more.
01/31/08
Chrissy, I loved this story. I enjoyed readingt it and it would also be perfect for a young boys to read. Nice lesson to be learned. I felt like I was there with Simon. It was action-packed. Very exciting! Awesome writing, girlfriend!
Laury
01/31/08
Absolutely exciting and action-packed. A wonderful read - and absolutely deserving of 6th in advanced (not to mention 20th overall!). Wonderful, my dear friend.