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TITLE: Illumination
By dub W
01/17/08

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Part 1 � the Offing

Rain
Keeps falling

The creek does rise.

Light
Is hiding

The sky�s a cloud.

Child
There crying

Night dreams.

Cats
Come pawing

Cod breath.

Poet
Words alluding

Papers in the wind.

Priest
Die�s preaching

Only clogged ears.

Fish
Not swimming

Metal home.

Cookies
In broken jarring

Tears load the floor.

Babies
Sit wondering

Dampness on the cloth

Lovers
Always quarreling

Prayers lost along way.

Part II � the Catastrophe

Humankind
Blind crawling

A joke of the cosmos.

Professor
Lost in non-sensing

Never learned.

Worker
Self perpetuating

Ring cash register ring.

Client
A grouper mouthing

Suck the air.

Part III � The Resolve

Mothers
Blessed souling

Eve�s daughters

Fathers
Rocks building

Names to remember.

Friends
Professional allying

I�ll have super size.

Part IV � Conclusion

God
Hand Blessing

The Great I am.

Jesus
Love Walking

A final answer.

Question
Fingers Raising

Here I am Lord, Send Me.

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Member Comments
Member	Date
Debbie Wistrom	01/25/08
I can't help but feel a placing with this one. Not a poem lover, I am stuck with this, I'm going to print this one out, can't wait to see who this is and read everything else.
Hanne Moon	01/26/08
You written something here that really makes a person have to stop, read, read again - and think! Very deep, very well-written.
Dee Yoder	01/27/08
This poem soaks slowly into the reader's thinking as it's read. I like the meager words-like a sketch that makes us figure out the meaning from a rough drawing. Very interesting format.
Jan Ackerson	01/28/08
Wow--do I ever love this poem! Simply superb, and I love the subtlety of it. p.s.--lose the apostrophe in "Dies". Wonderful structure and pacing, and I also love the fact that it's got real flow and rhythm, something not many free verse poems can claim.
LauraLee Shaw	01/30/08
This is so brilliant and creative that I'm not even sure I understand it totally. Maybe you could illuminate me via I.M. so that I can learn...
Sally Hanan	01/30/08
Very different and enojoyed greatly might I add. Please do enlighted us once all is revealed. This is way too intelligent for my small brain.
Loren T. Lowery	01/30/08
I think "Illumination" is a fitting title for this thought provoking poem. That it is free verse makes it even more intriguing as the reader finds their way to that final caste of light.
Sara Harricharan	01/30/08
Hmmm, I can honestly say that I've never read something like this before. It's different and interesting, with the format and the imagery. Nice title. ^_^
Beth LaBuff	01/30/08
Definitely takes a second read. I like the progession under each heading. Your poetry gives wonderful pictures using few words. I especially liked the "baby--dampness on the cloth" and priests/clogged ears, and poet/papers in the wind. Very creative!
Gerald Shuler	01/30/08
This reads like Proverbs. Every truth reveals deeper truths that lead you to understanding the only truth that is the true truth... Jesus. Exceptional writing.