The Official Writing Challenge
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01/17/08
Amazing writing. When the lady speaks about her being the one who's come for the vase it is not completely clear that it's her, which made me have to go back and read it again. I don't completely get the part about the vase sitting at home either...nevertheless, I love your writing.
01/17/08
The writing is very beautiful and I was fully engaged in the story. I had trouble understanding the last bit, too. I'm not sure what happened! Your descriptions of the waterfront and shops, the wealth in contrast to the MC's own lack of wealth is great.
01/18/08
Delightful imagery and a poignant reminder to keep ourselves grounded in God. I liked the way that you made your rich lady kind and generous rather than opting for the stereotyped arrogant and greedy.
Your descriptions are wonderful.
01/20/08
Wonderful descriptions and voice.