The Official Writing Challenge
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01/17/08
Perfect illustration of the topic. I love the storyline. It reminds me of my favorite movie a little: "Sense and Sensibility." (Kate Winslet's character). Anyway, you nailed it! Awesome job.
01/18/08
I like the old western feel of this, especially the dialouge and the descriptions that made this piece come alive for me. I was really, really hoping that Elizabeth would change her mind and come around. *sigh* but the ending did show the consequences that some choices bring. Good job! ^_^
01/19/08
Excellent. Just what’s needed to bring the proverb to life. I particularly liked the way that Elizabeth disappeared at the end – a touch of mystery that saved you having to make space for a long-winded confession. The story stands on its own really well.
01/21/08
Great sense of setting here, and the last paragraph was just right.