The Official Writing Challenge
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01/18/08
Boy, this guy is just falling all over himself to "wander". He seems bent on doing it no matter what and I don't like him at all. You certainly gave the reader a character to strongly dislike. You were able to illustrate this topic with a totally loathsome husband!
01/19/08
Go Mrs. Fisher - she is saying all the things about Zizi that the husband should be saying. Sad to see that he completely missed everything she said to him.
You certainly succeeded in creating an obnoxious character, as well as an excellent contrast with his wonderful wife.
01/20/08
Perfect title - this one practically broke my heart. You really hope he'll get a clue at some point, eh? You made your point expertly.