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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: The Church (12/06/07)

TITLE: Zion Church in the Wilderness
By Janice Cartwright
12/12/07


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Out from his castle and across the fields
The good prince flew at a gallop
Where blue hills rolled and day bloomed fair
And lilies glistened in crystal air
And he sought a beautiful maiden
He sought a beautiful maiden

He turned his face toward Canaan land
To seek where he must find
Where the sun burnt hot and crops were brown
And deeds of pagan gods renown
And he sought a beautiful maiden
He sought a beautiful maiden

It was in this place he heard the mewl
In the land of the Amorite
Where he hunkered down to blood-wet earth
Humid still from her nascent birth
And he found a beautiful maiden
He found a beautiful maiden

"O the piteous scrap," the sweet prince mused,
"Will none on earth take care?"
But the babe wept long to its motherís shame
And fledgling king its nurse became
For he found a beautiful maiden
He found a beautiful maiden

The child waxed fat in a princess manse
She feasted on oil and honey
And the good prince decked her with ornaments
Her arms with golden bracelets
For he found a beautiful maiden
He found a beautiful maiden

Then the heathen heard of her beauty rare
They came from far to see
And the prince cried aloud for his precious gem
When his only love lay down for them
And he sought a virtuous maiden
He sought a virtuous maiden

The wise prince knew what he must do
His seal was waxed and set
He would barter his blood for her penalty-
His wounds would set her free
For he sought a virtuous maiden
He sought a virtuous maiden

For a day he delayed on the silvery plain
He came to a narrow river
Where the water ran deep and dark gloom slept
And shadow and grave their counsel kept
And he sought a virtuous maiden
He sought a virtuous maiden

The prince sat straight on his snow white horse
He plunged into murky depths
Where the banks sloped in and light grew dim
And his succor came alone from Him
And he sought a virtuous maiden
He sought a virtuous maiden

A king rose up from that watery grave
He burst from there like light
For he conquered sin and death and hell
Redeemed his love from where she fell
And he wed a virtuous maiden
He wed a virtuous maiden

________

Taken from Ezekiel, entire 16th chapter, and New Testament Holy Scriptures


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Marilyn Schnepp 12/15/07
If nothing else, you've sent me to the Bible to read Ezekiel 16...as I find nothing about the topic of Church here; however, I expect to find it the scripture you have referenced. Your verses are lovely and sound like a song...now I must leave my commenting to read what Ezekiel has to say about "The Church". Thank you.
Joanne Sher 12/15/07
You have some lovely images here. Especially liked the last stanza.
Dee Yoder 12/16/07
Well, I believe you've written a beautiful narrative about the original Church AND managed to bring in the blood-bought Church also. Master crafting and right on topic, IMHO. It's lovely writing.
Laury Hubrich 12/16/07
First, what is IMHO? Now then, this was interesting - very. So creative. Awesome job and I'll be reading your scripture reference, too!
Laury
Catrina Bradley 12/17/07
I'm off to read Ez 16 so I can understand this better. However, my not understanding completely didn't prevent me from enjoying this tremendously. It's just me and poetry. :) Such beautiful rhythm - I love the rhyming pattern and the repeated lines at the ends of the stanzas. I can't wait to find out who this poet is! :) Cat
Catrina Bradley 12/19/07
Me again. Now it all makes sense. :) Beautiful work. Thanks for sharing this. :)
Jan Ackerson 12/19/07
This is excellent in every way--on topic, beautifully written, superb images.

My only nitpick is the title, which doesn't seem to match the tone of this ballad.

This is musical and lovely.
Temple Miller12/19/07
I agree: except for the title, you've created a beautiful allegory of the maiden/bride/church. Your meter is perfect and the narrative flows smoothly. I love it!
Tim Pickl12/19/07
Wonderful piece: it reads like a song!
Sharlyn Guthrie12/19/07
Beautiful! Awesome! and right on topic.
Sara Harricharan 12/19/07
This was very nice, I liked the repeating line with seraching for a beautiful maiden, finding her, etc. Very nice flow..now I will have to read Ez 16 for myself. Good job.