The Official Writing Challenge
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Wonderful description here. You held my interest all the way though, I confess, I'm really afraid of snakes. Thankfully, you didn't meet any. I love the way you ended this in the tiny chapel. Good writing!
12/15/07
As a So Cal native (no longer living there) you made an immediate connection with me for all the familiar locations. Then, your descriptive writing and wonderful storytelling kept me engaged. Lovely.
12/16/07
The trip to the little chapel on the hill was foreign to me as I'm not from CA; however, after once getting past the highways, byways, jumping curbs and going through tunnels, etc, etc, etc,...I found the story beautifully done; written very well, and with a touching and emotional filled finale'. I enjoyed this piece immensely.
12/16/07
I felt like it was me on the bike and me climbing the canyon wall. This is excellent writing and the descriptions are beautiful and vivid. Love this little hidden chapel story.
12/16/07
Great details puts the reader in the middle of the story. Maybe a bit weak on topic, but beautifully constructed.