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12/15/07
Nice little snapshot of that day.
I would have loved a bit more on the characters - maybe what they're feeling? Their reactions to the surroundings? Makes a better connection for the reader that way.
Enjoyed this.
12/16/07
Simpler times; that's what your church's day at the river exemplifies. We long for those days when church wasn't all about the atmosphere, the music, the style; just people gathering and worshipping and praising the Lord. Nice vignette of a special day.
12/19/07
Right about that time when the world snuck into the church, the building became more important than its reason for being. If Jesus would choose a stable to be born in, no reason why a sow barn should be despised. I love the "feel" of this.