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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Home Group (11/29/07)

TITLE: Frank N. Stein's Home Group
By Sue Dent
12/05/07


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Frank N. Stein’s Home Group

With daylight savings time gone, darkness fell quicker and made the trek up the limb-littered sidewalk a little tricky. It didn’t help anyone’s nerves when they considered the house was set a fairly good distance from the street.

“Did you write the address down right?” a nervous Raymond asked Phil. He’d stopped next to his wife Sandra to give Raymond a chance to answer before they moved on.

“Yes,” Raymond replied. “And if I’m not mistaken we both verified it back there at the curb—under the streetlight.”

“Okay, no need to get testy.”

“Let’s just all calm down,” Phil’s wife Sheryl said, hiding behind her own apprehension. “I’m sure Frank and Cindy—Stein, have a lovely home.”

Phil swallowed hard. “You know, I learned last week at home group that Frank’s middle name was Nathan. That would make him Frank N. Stein.”

Phil’s wife rolled her eyes. “So his dad had a wicked sense of humor.”

They continued on, made their way cautiously around the winding path, pulling their coats around them as they went. Frank and Cindy were members of their Home Group. They’d been quiet members but they were members none-the-less. Sure, everyone knew their turn would come to host the weekly Bible Study, they just never expected anything like this. The weathered steps that led up to the long front porch creaked as the group made their way up onto it.

“Man, I wish I could see. This place is creepy in the dark.” Raymond’s imagination typically ran away with him. This evening was no different. “So who’s gonna knock?”

Phil looked around. “I don’t know but where is everyone else? We can’t be the only ones to show up.”

“Maybe the others are already—inside.

Sheryl peered through a window. “Well, if they’re inside, they’re awfully quiet.”

“Don’t,” Sandra cautioned her husband. She knew that look. He was going to say something she’d regret.

In response, he shoved his hands in the pockets of his coat. “Fine, but I’m not knocking.”

“Then I will.” Yet even Sandra was hesitant. Finally, she did manage a few raps and the door squeaked open.

“Oh, no,” Raymond said when Phil took a step forward. “Un-uh! I’m not going in there.”

Sandra shook her head. “Then you can stay out here.”

The others followed after Phil.

“Hey,” Raymond shouted. “Wait for me!”

They couldn’t see much in the dark but they could hear. And what they heard were the muffled cries of someone calling out. They followed the sounds into the kitchen.

“Hello,” Phil said when the voice grew louder.

“Over here!” It was Frank. Phil rushed to open the door he was trapped behind.

“Thank-you,” Frank said. “I’ve been in there for nearly an hour. I went down to change a fuse and got locked in. Quite a few others showed up but I don’t think they stayed.”

“I wonder why?” Raymond asked, earned a jab in the ribs from his wife.

Frank sighed. “Guess it wasn’t all that inviting. This is my grandparent’s old house. We’ve been renovating.” He reached to flip on a light and revealed where the bulk of the work had been done.

Sheryl gasped. “This is amazing!”

“Indeed,” Sandra seconded.

“Yeah,” Frank said. “I thought we’d have the Home Group in here. Cindy will be back in a minute. She ran to the store to get a few things. Maybe the others will come back when they see the lights on.”

Raymond couldn’t stop staring. “Isn’t it amazing how God works.”

The confounded stares were hard to ignore. “Oh, do share,” Sandra said.

“Well, first we walked in darkness and were afraid but then we saved Frank and were rewarded with light.”

Sandra rolled her eyes while the others laughed. "Please don't humor him. It will only get worse.”

Frank heard a knock at the door. “Hey, it sounds like the others have come back.”


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Laury Hubrich 12/07/07
Awesome story! Awe-some!!! I really like the Frank n stein title, too. Very, very good! If I were wearing a hat, my hat would go off to you:)
Laury
Johnna Stein12/07/07
Your title drew me in; I am married to Frank Stein and he has been teased his whole life with his name (his mother didn't realize what she'd done until he was 3 days old as his formal name is Franciscus!) I am also lovingly referred to as the bride of Frankenstein. Liked your piece!
Dee Yoder 12/07/07
Clever and funny! I like poor Frank's name, and it would be fun to tell people where you were going that night for home group, wouldn't it?
dub W12/10/07
Title drew me in - I loved the story...
Lynda Schultz 12/11/07
Great story.
Kate Grey12/11/07
Enjoyable story, and it pokes fun at the overly-developed sense of drama many of us writers have. :)
Angela M. Baker-Bridge 12/13/07
Congratulations Sue!! Wow!!! Dancing for you... doesn't God have weird timing? Glad to see you smiling again. Angel
Sara Harricharan 12/13/07
Heehee! This was hilarious. I was all drawn into the whole 'creepy thing' with the title and the creaky house-lol. You had me going all the way to the end, love the last lines! ^_^

***Congrats on your highly commended!***
Beth LaBuff 12/13/07
What fun and exceptional creativity!! Love the orange box across from the title. Congrats Sue!!!
Kristen Hester 12/13/07
This story has me on the edge of my seat the entire time. Great job. Bravo!
Kristen Hester 12/13/07
Oop. I meant "had" me on the edge of my seat.
Shari Armstrong 12/13/07
Too much fun... I was waiting for the twist at the end and wasn't disappointed :)
Verna Cole Mitchell 12/13/07
I loved this!
Catrina Bradley 12/13/07
What an enjoyable tale! Well done and congrats. :) Love, Cat
Sharlyn Guthrie 12/13/07
Lots of fun! Congratulations!
Joanne Sher 12/14/07
Oh, Sue - this is CLASSIC PQ! I absolutely loved it. I SO wish I'd gotten to it before the all-clear, or it would be "dazzling" as well. ;) Don't stop entering, girl!
Laury Hubrich 12/16/07
Congratulations! You were soooo very close to placing. I told you this was good, didn't I? The very first one to say it! LOL! What good taste I have! Keep on writing! As I said the first time -- AWESOME job!
Laury


   
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