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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Home Group (11/29/07)

TITLE: Just a Matter of Space
By Marilyn Schnepp
12/04/07


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Gazing into the mirror I was dismayed to see eight new gray hairs, a new worry line forming on my brow and 'old-time' wrinkles etched deeper and more prominent today than yesterday. "So, what else is new?" I thought to myself and muttered aloud to the mirror.

All week I had worried, fretted and stewed to the point of mental exhaustion, anxiety attacks and nail biting. But tomorrow...do or die, sink or swim...it would all be over.

It was my first time to host our weekly Bible Study Group, and my humble dwelling place consisted of a "teensy-weensy" apartment that could truthfully be described as a couple of large closets sewn together with a broom closet kitchen and linen closet bathroom thrown in for good measure.

I sprayed my reflection with a squirt of Windex, wiped it clean and then double checked the guest towels and tissue...and after repeating, "With God, All things are possible" three times, I pulled down the sofa bed and laid myself down to count my blessings instead of sheep; or would I again have to battle insomnia....


No, I got lucky...I perched myself atop the North Star on the rim of the Big Dipper, and watched...not Comet and Cupid, Dancer and Blitzen pulling a sleigh...but Jupiter and Mars, Venus, Neptune and Saturn, careening through space in a place they called home - the Universe!

As each planet did his or her orbit in perfect timing, I heard them chatting with one another as if they were sitting in their own home parlor...in outer space.

"Hey Neptune", said Mercury, the smallest and closest planet to the sun, "I bet you're freezing way out there, Eh?"

"Yeah, Merc, but then everybody doesn't get preferential treatment like you do - getting a front row orbit next to the sun and all the heat you want; by the way, Mars, the next time you orbit near Earth. Check her out. I hear those Earthlings she was given 7,000 eons ago are contaminating, polluting and poisoning her air and water with chemicals, smoke and sewage waste."

"Saturn to Home Group! Saturn to Home Group!" I heard her call as she orbited by, "Hey, all you guys, Remember how envious we all were when Earth was chosen as the planet for life? Given animals, trees, plants and Man? Jupiter, do you remember how you hit the ceiling... knocking all 12 of your moons askew? And, Mars, you turned beet red with anger, as Pluto, bless his heart, went into orbit and hasn't been seen for ages?"

Jupiter spoke up: "I told you guys Earth was too little to handle such a big task; I would have been a much better Mother to those Earthlings with all my extra turf - and I'd have my little Earthli...oops, I mean "Jupes" taking care of me properly, too!...Not killing me off."

"Yeah, yeah, Jupiter, you talk big," scorned Mars, "but wait till you have to deal with that old troublemaker that God evicted from Heaven. If he had landed on you instead of Earth...you might have a little compassion for our little sister who's been having to put up with him all these years. It could have been one of us, you know?"


The alarm went off. The day had arrived, and I was ready.

No problem! Everything worked out fine at the study group. Although packed like sardines into a small space, it was warm, friendly and cozy...and nothing like the quibbling, rivalry and coldheartedness that I had witnessed late last night on the Sci Fi Channel...

Hey, wait a minute. I don't have a Sci Fi Channel, I didn't turn on TV last night...Hmmm?

Correction, Let's make that...I had watched late last night by Special Dream Satellite, produced and directed by God, to explain to me how unimportant it is to have a vast expanse of space in order to talk about our Father's love, and to witness and study together in peace and fellowship with our fellow man.

God came through just like He said He would...Plus, a heck of a dream to boot!


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Jan Ackerson 12/07/07
I'm not a huge fan of "dream sequences", but I'll admit that I've never read one quite like this!

You have an appealing writer's voice.
Marilyn Schnepp 12/07/07
...And a heck of a dream is true! Old Mother Earth, despite all her troubles, never misses an orbit, and just keeps truckin'. God will not forsake the birthplace of His Son, which Earthlings will celebrate in just a few days. Peace on "Earth"...and Good Will toward men.
Joanne Sher 12/08/07
Very, VERY creative! This one was definitely cute. Bet you had fun writing it.
Temple Miller12/11/07
Unique take on the topic: that's high praise. I enjoyed it.
Lynda Schultz 12/11/07
Love it! What a unique take and a great truth.
Yvonne Blake 12/12/07
RED PEN: Very interesting setting! I like how you gave the planets personalities that fit them. I liked the idea of perching on the North Star.
This sentence is lacking commas to give it clarity. "I hear those Earthlings (,)she was given 7,000 eons ago(,) are contaminating, polluting and poisoning her air and water with chemicals, smoke and sewage waste."
The last "correction" was out of place. It's good, but should have been incorporated into the main story.
Nice message of being content.

David F. Palmieri Sr. 12/14/07
Good writing...don't let the gray hairs bother you, they are a sign of maturity and you worked hard for them...

I wanted to thank you for your comments on "Gopherwood, Right" I wasn't sure if I should submit it, but I believed the Lord gave me the idea. I only wanted to get the message across without being disrespectful.

Unfortunately, after getting the grandkids on the bus I was short on time...couldn't finish formatting and got it in at 8:59 AM...thank you for your honest comments...they are much appreciated...Dave