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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Home Group (11/29/07)

TITLE: Desperate Call
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12/03/07


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Tom answered the telephone on the second ring. “Hello, this is Tom.”

“Tom, it’s me, Steven.”

“Steven, how are things going for tonight? I was just saying to Judy I’m looking forward to you leading the study.”

“That’s why I called. We won’t be there. Suzie’s mother has taken ill and she’s been rushed to the hospital. They think it’s a heart attack and Suzie could be with her all night. The children haven’t had their baths yet and I just burnt the dinner. Half the wall above the stove is going to need a clean. Hannah’s crying because her doll lost its head and Stevie just ran over Molly’s fingers with his trike and... ”

“Whoa there, Brother. Sounds like you need some prayer,” Tom replied, tilting the telephone receiver for Judy to hear.

“That’s for sure. I have four very unhappy kids here and things are getting kind of desperate. I’m not sure how Suzie copes on her own during the day with four babies under five. She’s been gone half an hour and... Yes, I could do with some prayer.”

“Steven, you need more than prayer. Look, there’s only going to be the Millers and the Jessop’s here tonight due to all the Christmas functions going on. How about I call them and we’ll all head over there and help out. When the children are asleep, we’ll spend some time in prayer for Suzie’s mother as well. Wait... Judy’s giving me a signal here... We’ll bring our dinner over and something extra. We’ll come early and I’ll call the others from there.”

“I don’t know what to say, Tom.”

“That’s what our home group is all about, Steven.”

“Thanks.”

“It’s interesting how tonight’s topic was The Good Samaritan.”

“Yes, except now it’ll be a practical lesson. I’d better go, Tom. Sally needs her diaper changed.”

“OK, Steven. We won’t be long. The Samaritans are on their way."


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David F. Palmieri Sr. 12/06/07
Great writing...I am so glad the group went over to give help and not just pray...

Prayer is extremely important, but works best when practical help is applied also.

You get my (unqualified) vote...good job.

Ya gotta love, home groups...
Laury Hubrich 12/07/07
Great entry! It is exactly what home groups are about. I like how the group went to help out the franctic dad, too. Bravo!
Laury
Dianne Janak12/08/07
This was great. This is an example of a healthy small group, and some people whose hearts have blended. Great writing. Made me want to join this group. Not all of them are this sensitive to each other's needs.
Joanne Sher 12/08/07
Love the practical help - prayer can be a copout, but this is prayer with feet on. Love it.
william price12/09/07
A very true and honest protrayal. Thank God for prayer! God bless.
Temple Miller12/09/07
Perfect story with great dialogue and an apt title. Loved it.
Beth LaBuff 12/10/07
I could feel the desparation of the father. Really nice story and good writing on this!
Jan Ackerson 12/10/07
How wonderful! Exactly the way the body of Christ should work--and I like to think that we usually do.

If you even expand this (and I hope you do), it'd be great to have a few more narrative sentences in addition to the conversation, to really put the reader "on the scene".
Lynda Schultz 12/11/07
BINGO! This IS the way Christians need to think, and act. Good job.