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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Home Group (11/29/07)

TITLE: The Sheep on His Right
By Dee Yoder
12/02/07


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Inside the House:

“Hi, Marcia and Carl. It’s good to see you two! How’re things going with you guys? Go on in; Jesse and Amanda are already here.”

“Good, good. I finished my work on the church bulletins for next week just in time. I almost thought we wouldn’t make it here tonight.”

“Yeah, I know how that is…I had so much to do for my class this morning, I felt like a chicken running around with its head cut off.”

“Did you see the two Schneider girls? Weren’t they just darling, the way their Mom dressed them alike for Sunday school?”

“Really cute. Hey, here’s some hot chocolate. I thought we’d all like a nice warm cup before we get started on the Bible lesson.”

“Sounds good. It’s freezing out there!”

“Well, we’d better get to it, gang; the minutes are ticking away. Who wants to read the scripture verses to us tonight? Robert? Thanks. The text tonight is Matthew 25: 34-40. Okay, Robert, go ahead.”

“Alrighty…uh…here it is: Then the King will say to those on his right, Come, you who are blessed by my Father; take your inheritance, the kingdom prepared for you since the creation of the world. For I was hungry and you gave me something to eat, I was thirsty and you gave me something to drink, I was a stranger and you invited me in-”*


“Sorry to interrupt, Robert, but let’s stop and discuss that portion of scripture, okay?”





Outside the House:

“It’s a cold, cold world…a cooolldd world…where’s the middle? Where’s the middle…the middle of the road?”

“Hey, fella! Get off the road-you wanna get hit? Weirdo! Man! What a nut! He should be locked up or somethin’…go back to the nuthouse, Crazy Bob!”

“I’ll show you…I’ll show you…here’s the middle, the middle, the middle…there’s a house, a house, a house…a house with a light…a light…a light. A. LIGHT. A. LIGHT. There’s a house…with a light…and some people…and a light…and they laugh, laugh, laugh, laugh…and they read…and they read…and they read…and there’s the light…the light…the light…The Light.”


Inside the House:

“Let’s stop again, Robert. Look out the window-it’s that guy that walks all over town. My kids call him Crazy Bob.”

“Yeah, I’ve seen him everywhere…how can he stand the cold like that?”

“He must be used to it.”

“He looks like he needs a warmer coat. It’s got to be in the twenties out there.”

“Yeah. Poor guy. Should we do something? Call the Center or the police to help him?”

“What a shame…on a night like this…they should have a place for people like him to go in the winter.”

Maybe we should call the Center…”

“Well, I guess we could do that…wait-never mind-he’s walking again.”

“Let’s remember to say a prayer for Bob tonight when it comes time to give our prayer requests, Okay? Go on, Robert…you left off with verse 40, I think.”

“Oh. Uh…okay: The King will reply, ‘I tell you the truth, whatever you did for one of the least of these brothers of mine, you did for me…”





Outside the House:

“It’s the middle…middle…middle…it’s a cold…cold…cold…world…world…world…a light…light…light…the middle…middle…middle…”


*The Holy Bible, New International Version


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Verna Cole Mitchell 12/06/07
This wonderful story illustrates so poignantly the necessity for doing what the Word says, not just talking about it. This is a convicting piece.
Dianne Janak12/08/07
Soo convicting, so telling, too true and real, gives me goosebumps because it hits home as to why the world calls us hypocrits. I love that you didn't try to tie this up and make it pretty. Leaving it hanging gives it more power. Great writing.
Joanne Sher 12/08/07
Amazing message - convicting and so true-to-life. Don't we miss the "right" solutions way too many times? Excellent.
william price12/09/07
I thought it was clever and quick. Hopefully we all can work on being more consistant. Good job. God bless.
Beth LaBuff 12/09/07
This is chilling (pun unintentional :) in its ability to hit right to our weakness. Really effective (and convicting) writing! Good work!
Sharlyn Guthrie12/09/07
Your message comes through loud and clear in the jumbled words of a "disturbed" man. Great job!
Jan Ackerson 12/10/07
Excellent job with the "word salad" typical of schizophrenics. This one really packs a punch, Dee!
Patty Wysong12/10/07
Ouch! You didn't pull your punch with that piece. Great way to use Crazy Bob's dialog to drive home (even more) the message. Great job.
Lynda Schultz 12/11/07
Ouch! Hit that nail right in the center with the first smack. Good story making a very important point.
LauraLee Shaw12/12/07
Wow, how unique and powerful! Great job!
Sara Harricharan 12/12/07
WOW. This one hits close today. Gave me goosebumps while reading it and the shifting changes from inside to outside-wow. 'Crazy Bob's' view was so haunting. Great writing!
Temple Miller12/12/07
The contrast between the group's dialogue and Crazy Bob's built a wonderful tension. And the lack of action at the end was like a knife stab. Awesome, awesome story.
Tim Pickl12/12/07
The 'acts' of the apostles mean they did something -- they acted on their faith! Wonderful writing--this could be a skit!
Loren T. Lowery12/12/07
Perfect potrait of reality. As Jesus said of his deciples, their spirits are willing, but their flesh is weak. We always have such good intentions until it takes us out of our comfort zones. Great job.
Paula Titus 12/12/07
Anointed and convicting, superb writing - thank you.
Sheri Gordon12/12/07
This is really good. I love the way you "show" this powerful message rather than just "telling" it. Great job with the topic.
LaNaye Perkins12/12/07
This was really good my friend. You made some very convincing and convicting pionts in this. Well done!
LaNaye Perkins12/12/07
Oh my, I did it again. :( Forgot to check my response for errors before submitting it. Sorry, it's that loose nut behind my keyboard again. sheeeesh!
Joanney Uthe12/12/07
This is powerful! The bolded scene settings add to the "inside our comfort zone" part of the message. Wonderful job!
Janice Cartwright12/16/07
This is powerful Dee, bold and clean in style. Like a good sculptor you chiseled away everything that didn't look like your story leaving us with an awesome read.