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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Gifts (of the Spirit or service) (11/22/07)

TITLE: Sorrow's Companion
By Pat Guy


I couldn’t see his face but I knew that look in his eyes. It was in the way he stared at nothing as we both waited for the light to change. It was in the way he sighed, and in the way one lone tear followed the strained lines along his cheek.

“Dear Lord, please help this man – You know his pain.”


Her mother was drunk and irrational again. I could tell by the tone of my daughter’s voice as she tried to console her friend – an almost nightly occurrence. Threats and verbal abuse plagued this family of struggling teens and their mom’s latest boyfriend.

“Dear Lord, please protect these children and reach their mother somehow.”


She must be in her sixties, or older. Two young children walked along side a stroller as they all crossed the highway to school. The baby had a hold of its own pudgy feet. I have seen her walking everywhere. Does she not drive? She’s all of four feet herself with silky white hair piled high walking briskly as she probably does most mornings.

“Dear Lord, please bless this grandmother as she raises her beloved grandchildren.”


I caught a glimpse of a backpack disappearing behind shrubs set close to a house. – I drove on as though I hadn’t noticed. A young boy darted out and ran toward an inside street and I sensed a troubled little soul ... a haunted expression reflected in the mirror. I turned a corner to double check, and yes, he ran in the opposite direction – his cargo heavy on his back. I stopped a police friend and told him my concerns.

“Dear Lord, please intervene in this little boy’s life.”


A young lady was standing on a back road laden down with her personal belongings. I think I know where she is headed yet I know she would not be allowed to tell me. I stopped to offer her a ride and dropped her off at a hidden dirt road along the way. At the end of that road is The Haven House for battered women.

“Dear Lord, please go with this brave young woman and guide her to You.”


She was dressed in black from head to toe, topping her look with hot-pink spikes. Everything about her screamed, “Look at me! Look at me!” But her tattered black fingernails betrayed the child she hid inside. She nibbles them as she waits for her friends to finish the ride at the amusement park. In one unguarded moment she is vulnerable and insecure.

“Dear Lord, please reveal to her how much you love her.”


Silent sorrow is everywhere I look – everywhere I go, but I am not alone before the Lord. The Holy Spirit carries the burden of intercession as my spirit prays for each and every one.

My Partner in prayer ... my Companion before the Lord ... where two or more are gathered.

Ephesians 6:18, Romans 8:26 NIV “And pray in the Spirit on all occasions with all kinds of prayers and requests ... for the Spirit Himself intercedes for us with groans that words can not express.”

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Sheri Gordon11/30/07
This is lovely, and a great reminder. I like the examples you chose to use -- the same type of people we probably see everyday. The writing in this is simple, and powerful. Good job with the topic.
Verna Cole Mitchell 12/01/07
I appreciated the simplistic beauty of this story. I could see clearly each person's need and the heart of the one who not only prayed, but also took positive action when possible.
Janice Cartwright12/01/07
An excellent article that illustrates how multi-faceted is the gift of the intercessor.
Beth LaBuff 12/04/07
I love the compassion shown here. Your title is perfect. This is beautifully written.
LaNaye Perkins12/05/07
You grabbed my heart and kept it all the way through this wonderful entry. You did an awesome job on this.
Dee Yoder 12/05/07
The many scenarios in which the Holy Spirit uses the MC to pray for those in need are portrayed very realistically. The story is full of the kinds of spiritual meetings we should be aware of every day. These are the reasons we have gifts to share!
Joy Faire Stewart12/05/07
This is a wonderful reminder that everyone is in need of prayer and that we all have the gift of prayer.
Temple Miller12/05/07
What a great job you've done in setting each scene with its characters. Your theme runs smoothly through each one, and you've captured the hurt in each.
Kristen Hester12/05/07
Requested Red Pen Comments:
I won't need a lot of red ink for these comments. These stories are lovely. Your descriptions are written with authencity. I could picture each scene.

Part of me wanted to hear more about each scene. I wanted to know what happened after that. You probably don't know, though. Still, that was what I was thinking, "What happened?" Only in Heaven. But that might be an interesting story--What's going on in Heaven when we pray. The bigger picture.

I know this will sound wrong, becasue PRAYER is such an important spiritual gift, but for the topic I wanted a little more "out of the ordinary." Okay, I feel bad for even saying it, but you said, "RED PEN." I don't at all want to belittle this most important gift! Or maybe I just wanted a more powerful ending. Perhaps a view from God being pleased with his prayer warrior, or seeing her in a situation where someone is praying for her. Just some thoughts. It's PERFECT that way it is and I had to stretch to find these things!
Sara Harricharan 12/05/07
This was beautiful in a simple sort of way. I liked the short examples (I wish there'd been more to explain a few I didn't quite get) but the message was easy enough to find. Your title fits and especially the one line prayers. Excellent job!
Jan Ackerson 12/05/07
Pat, I love this, from the awesome title, to the clipped writing style, to the specific examples you chose...Here's my niggle--there were some tense switches here and there. I particularly liked that you narrator will probably never knew the results of her prayers...that adds an element of melancholy, but also of submission to the gift.
Pam Carlson-Hetland12/05/07
I found this a very intriguing piece. The examples you gave are certainly many that I've encountered myself. So, to me, it's shows what God will put in our path at any given time when we're out doing our normal routine. The difference is that an intercessor automatically prays, the rest of us have to make a conscious effort to do so. I thought this was excellent.
LaNaye Perkins12/05/07
I am feeling like I am not good with the red ink. Like I said earlier, you grabbed my heart and kept it all the way through. Maybe when I get good enough to be in masters, I will be able to find something to put red ink on. :/
william price12/05/07
To start with, Pat, you know you're one of my favorite writers, but I didn't see any of the risk taking, stretching I've come to love. Not that we just can't write a simple story, which by the way, was simply elegant. Your writing was sharp and crisp with great pace. Now, I am all about intercession and prayer and you communicated, hammered, home your point extremely well, which is our goal. But, on the creative side, after about the third small story it got predictable. You know, see a sorrowful situation and then pray.
I don't know how you could have changed it up, maybe a paragraph explaining the source of her passion for such a ministry, or maybe a flashback to a time she wished she would have received some prayer, or maybe an acknowlegement that someone must have been praying for her through some of her sorrowful times. Anyway, I just felt it needed something.
And, I am probably the only one, but I didn't get the title completely, being a companion with sorrow when the intercessor was there to defeat sorrow.
Anyway, that is just me being, probably to honest and a lil picky.
I realy did enjoy the read and was ministered to. God bless.
Joanne Sher 12/05/07
Lovely little vignettes - I have no NEW red for you, but agree that it got a bit predictable. I ADORE these, though.
Peter Stone12/06/07
Hi, some 'red pen' comments. I enjoyed reading about a group of realistic problems, and someone with a gift of intercession praying for them all. How often do we become desensitized to such situations and forget to pray? However, I would have preferred to have seen perhaps half the number of examples, and then showing some form of resolution and response to the prayers, even if as from a glimpse into the future. Also, not quite on topic. Intercession is not one of the gifts mentioned in 1 Cor 12 nor Romans 12:6-8.
Amy Michelle Wiley 12/11/07
Beautiful and powerful story. How often I've seen the pain around me and prayed... and how much more often have I been too busy to notice. Thanks for the reminder to take the time to care.