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11/16/07
This has so many facets - it's touching, funny, inspiring, convicting. I mean, just who's encouraging who here? ;-D This is great. I really enjoyed reading this.
11/16/07
I really liked this. Creative approach. God bless.
11/17/07
Great detail and descriptions. I was right there.
11/18/07
I enjoyed this slice of life in a rural church.
11/20/07
Great story for this topic! Very realistic. As a college student, years ago, I went to churches this poor in money and rich in Spirit.
11/20/07
Wonderful writing! I love everything about it: the title, your use of words like, "innards" and "doggone". Then the refrigerator was a "1957" model...ha, any significance there? :) :) I've seen a few of the "sit-at-your-own-risk" piano benches you've described. Everything fits so well in this!
11/20/07
Great work Dee, and I love the message. I could almost smell the mustiness of the delapidated building; and your description of the near-barren room with sunshine filtering through dust particles provided a vivid mental picture. For me it seemed to symbolize the spiritual sunshine that shone through their humble worship service.
11/21/07
Excellent work, as usual! I especially like the verse you used at the end. Perfect for your story.
11/21/07
I really liked your characters. Great job in describing them to us and in describing the church building:) Wonderful writing!
Laury
11/21/07
This is just excellent in every way: the characters, the details, the writing, and especially the message. Great job!
11/21/07
I loved this. It was so different, there was so much inside of it, all the characters and how they changed at the end. This is great! Good job!
11/21/07
Thank God for these ecclesiastical moments that can change us forever. You have such a wonderful way with dialect that is so engaging and moves the story forward in a “can’t stop reading” kind of way. Great insightful writing.
11/21/07
You've woven a simple, direct message into this piece. I love the voice, love the tone, LOVE it all. Great job.
11/21/07
I love the characters in your story. You did a fine job of bringing this story to life for the reader. Well done!
11/21/07
Excellent. I loved the descriptions that so clearly showed what the place looked like, as well as the humor. And the conclusion that God encourages us is great.
01/11/08
Dee, I love this piece. The voice and feel of it is perfect.