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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Evangelism (11/01/07)
“Kiddo, let me sing to you.”

“No, want sing to baby. Sit down (pats bed).”

I sat as she cradled her naked doll into her arms and rattled off Jesus Loves Me with the special family ending. She transitioned directly into Go Tell it on the Mountain.

“Go, tell it on mountain,
Over hills, ‘n ev-where
Go, tell it on mountain
Jesus Christ is bored.”*

I awoke from my loneliness and recovered from my demoted status to pay closer attention. The chorus was repeated, and sure enough, “Jesus Christ is bored.” And for some reason, I wondered who was talking through my child.

Is Jesus Christ bored? Maybe, just maybe, he is. Maybe he’s finding couches to wipe his index finger on because we won’t acknowledge him long enough to offer him a Kleenex.

As Kiddo transitioned into pop culture and Bubbly started in her toes, to her nose, and later from her soul’**, she rocked that doll to sleep two feet from my lost soul. Then, I heard him speaking through the ‘smile, please stay for awhile’** and he said, “Kiddo, let me sing to you.”

Kiddo sang for another ten minutes. The doll suffered several catastrophic injuries, all cured with simple kisses and more swaying. These being Kiddo’s only three songs, I heard about the bored man sitting beside me in the bed wiping his fingers on the footboard at least seven times. Each time he said, “Kiddo, let me sing to you.”

Finally, Kiddo became too tired to continue, and baby - hung upside down by her foot in Kiddo’s hand - had certainly fallen fast asleep. She approached me while looking to my side, “Sing to me. Sing me Jesus Loves Me. Sing me Tell it on Mountain. ”

That night, ‘Jesus Christ was born.'


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*Go Tell it on the Mountain is a Christmas carol and African-American spiritual
**Bubbly is a current, hit song by Colbie Caillat, 2007
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Dee Yoder
11/11/07
I like the writing in this entry, but I don't fully understand some of the references! It could have something to do with the late hour I'm reading this...but, the descriptions are vivid and strong.
Benjamin Graber
11/13/07
I like this. A good mixture of a cute storyline and yet still being thought-provoking as well...
Yvonne Blake 
11/13/07
I love the dialogue. Kids do change the words all the time! ...and sometimes those mistakes can speak to us adults. I even like the picture of her wiping her finger on the bed. Great job!
Terry R A Eissfeldt 
11/14/07
Your story brought me back to the years that have flown....
The verse, "a little child will lead them" is ringing in my ears after reading your captivating story
Beckie Stewart
11/14/07
I enjoyed this cute little story of the lessons we learn from the things our little ones say.
Jan Ackerson
11/15/07
Wowsers, this sentence rocks my socks off:

Maybe he’s finding couches to wipe his index finger on because we won’t acknowledge him long enough to offer him a Kleenex.

Love the mood of this little gem.