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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Evangelism (11/01/07)

TITLE: What Love Can Do
By Benjamin Graber
11/04/07


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The razor shards of a broken heart
Have pierced my soul as well; a stab
Of red-hot pain shot through my life,
With bleak despair my mind was grabbed…

They say that time should heal such wounds,
But it has merely dulled the pain;
For every time I raise my head
My failures cite my past of shame...

Forgetting summer days, when smiles
Would decorate a happy face;
Each day now reinforces strong
The walls of failures’ lone embrace…

~~~

But in a maze with no escape,
There is a key which tears it down:
The day your love had touched my life
And smiles had blossomed from my frown…

Your hand reached out to me that moment
And showed the Love that never dies;
I read of He who sees no failures
When I looked deep into your eyes…

One glance showed all that I had needed,
And Love’s brief war with shame was won;
Now I will spend eternity
Thanking God for all He’s done…


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Beth LaBuff 11/12/07
I like your "about face" in the second part of your poem, especially the contrast between this line, "My failures cite my past of shame" and this line, "And Love’s brief war with shame was won". You have some nice poetic thoughts "The razor shards of a broken heart
Have pierced my soul as well" Keep working on your poetry.
Yvonne Blake 11/13/07
You showed the pain in the beginning and how love can reach past it. The ryhthm and rhyme were well balanced.
LauraLee Shaw11/13/07
This is extremely creative and beautifully written. His love can certainly be seen in this piece!
william price11/13/07
Loved your poetic definition of one of the greatest weapons of evangelism ... love. I like a poet that actually has something to say. God bless.
Dee Yoder 11/14/07
Lovely contrasts and message. It's wonderfully written and crafted.
David (The Goliath Assassin)12/09/07
You know me well enough to know that I can certainly chill with this... Thanks Ben. It's much-needed therapy.


   
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