The Official Writing Challenge
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05/16/05
Wow - you packed a lot into this short piece. Personally, I would have liked to see a longer story - maybe drawing it out a bit, more one-sided conversation, making us wait a bit for the twist of her husband's death at the end. But it was wonderful writing all the same.
Blessings, Lynda
05/16/05
How often do we forget that there are those in the world that lose loved ones over the holidays! What a moving picture you painted! How little time we all have to do the things for someone else that would bless them! After I read your entry silently, I read it out loud to share it with my daughters.
05/16/05
Wow! You got me! I never saw it coming! Good job. Blessings, Cheri
Oh my..... if I was sleepy before you've got me wide awake now. You have a great plot! Creative twist! WHEW! My heart is still racing.
05/16/05
This was awesome! One of my favorites!
05/17/05
Very touching and sad.
05/18/05
A well written peice. My one disappointment was the woman's deferential question to her husband at the very end. Her character led me to believe she was quite capable of making decisions.
05/20/05
Very tight, everything worked. Bravo.
Here you are again Karen, congrats! Well done.
Congratulations, Karen! Your writing gift is like nitroglycerin -- not much needed to make the point. A powerful, poignant story, well-told. -- Lois
Very real, well-painted picture. I agree with Lynda that I would have liked more. Still, you did excellently well. I loved the deferential question at the end, too. The fact that she was knitting and kidding her husband about not taking her to a New Year party was powerful. Well done! Congratulations.