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11/01/07
This is cute. Your story makes a good point -- there are so many Sunday school classes, with so many names/interests; and still many people don't find a place to "fit in". Nice take on the topic.
11/02/07
I love this story--from title to end. Great points made but a fun read at the same time.
11/03/07
Great story and well written for taking points to heart.
11/03/07
I love the story. Really good characterization. As one who wishes the church would be more united and less divided, even when it comes down to Sunday School, I laughed at your descriptions. As one who doesn't "fit", I understood the problem. Good job.
11/03/07
That was adorable. There are a lot of people who need your Sunday School class. Very cute!
11/04/07
All the way through, I kept wondering if Yvonne was purposely crotchety to avoid the pain of being rejected by others. Kind of like "Reject them first before they get a chance to hurt you." There are far too many people like that, too.

You painted this characterization with your normal expertise, and I liked the ending very much. Offered hope.
11/04/07
I enjoyed the MC's sassy attitude and her pal, Miss Sadie. And I love the humor in the last paragraph.
11/04/07
This is delightful. Your MC really came alive. I *love* the last line, and chuckled out loud.
11/04/07
Is love brewing in the air between Kevin and Yvonne? Will there be a chapter 2? This was wonderful. I enjoyed every word. Great job.
11/04/07
I enjoyed your feisty MC and was hoping she's "attract" someone to match her in attitude.
11/04/07
Excellent characterization. I think Yvonne was once our church secretary, er, uh, administrative assistant. : )
11/04/07
I love the tempo in the first few paragraphs. The sentences aren't short, but they are clipped and it really makes her voice come alive. She's prickly, but I like her.
11/04/07
I feel as though I would have fit right in with this class. Great writing!
11/05/07
I love this article. God did indeed make all types of people, and all are needed and have their place in the church. Thanks for reminding us of this! Being a cat fan, my favorite line was 'and Miss Sadie, who in the contrary way of her feline ilk chooses to find me charming and irresistible'.
11/05/07
Thanks for a good Monday morning laugh! This entry was so good. I know a few Sadie's also. Keep on cranking out great stuff!
Laury
11/05/07
Clever and delightful. I also adore the last line. You did a wonderful job with putting us in your MC's mind (and mindset!). Loved it.
11/05/07
Great writing! Loved the title so I read on and was very surprised at the voice and how it led me through a delightful tale!! thanks for a good read:))
11/05/07
Love it! Yes, you were outside the box. :) I laughed when I read this, "an in-depth study of the genealogies in Numbers". If that was ever offered at our Sunday School I'd sign up for it. :) :)
11/06/07
Very nice. I'm glad there was a place after all, even if she had to make one to find someone she could relate to. Good job. ^_^
11/06/07
As usual, your entires are just a "notch above" with creative idea, characterization that is believable and always enjoyable! I keep telling you this!!
11/06/07
Very funny - Sign me up for that Numbers Geneaology class now! I felt like I really knew this character, as you really brought her to life.
11/06/07
Top notch. Acutally made me smile at the end, which must be rare because it shocked me. I appreciate attention to characterization and this was great, in fact beyond. I truly enjoyed this entry. God bless.
11/07/07
I love your voice! It's delightful and there's a lesson and a nugget wrapped in there--excellent! That last line is fabulous! :-) Hugs!
11/07/07
One of my favorites so far. I loved your character. I loved the flow. I loved the imagery. Very well done. Keep up the great writing!
11/07/07
Prickly indeed, but with a tender heart. You framed it all beautifully with great characterization and dialogue that brought everyone to life. I esp. liked the last line...too cute!
11/08/07
Congratulations on your much deserved 1st place. I love the quirkiness of the secretary -- I mean administrative assistant. :) Another excellent entry from you. Way to go.
11/08/07
Congratulations on the 1st Place EC! Well deserved and touching off anticipation for future great reads.
11/08/07
Congratulations. Beautiful job. Thanks for always making helpful comments on my pieces.
11/09/07
Congratulations, Jan! I knew this was a winner the first time I read it! Woo hoo!!!
Laury
11/09/07
Congratulations! Great article.
11/10/07
One of my favourite poems by William Cowper is The Nightingale and Glow-worm which again show that we should respect our innate differences and each glorify God in our own way.Excellent job, but where are the lilies?
11/14/07
Oh Jan, how fun. I got a good chuckle out of your last line. I'm so glad I stopped by for your merry-hearted medicine. Love, Crista
11/26/07
Jan,
I read this at a time when I have felt out of place. But as I read your story. I find a peace with the way God has made me. At times a cactus and at times a lilly. Thank you for your story