The Official Writing Challenge
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11/03/07
Your passion comes through loud and clear.

I'm not sure about how it ties in to the topic of Sunday School--are we supposed to be "eavesdropping" on a teacher's lesson? It lacks a bit of focus--it started out to be about healing, but strayed a bit.

Thank you for sharing your heart with us.
11/06/07
This was very interesting! I liked the idea of it being a 'lesson' plan.
Just a tip-add a few more spaces between paragraphs to make for eaiser reading.
Good job!