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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Christian Baptism (10/18/07)

TITLE: And God Smiled
By Rachel Burkum
10/25/07


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The Son was raised from the water,
A prime example for all.
A dove reached up to touch the Heavens,
Witnesses stood in awe.
…And God smiled.

The old man came down the aisle,
His face streaked with tears.
He fell to his knees before his Maker,
Knowing that it was time.
…And God smiled.

The little boy held his crayon still,
Thinking of the lesson.
He loved God and wanted salvation.
His decision was made that day.
…And God smiled.

The young woman in shame and guilt,
Knelt at the Father’s feet.
She begged forgiveness - sins removed.
A brand new child was born.
…And God smiled.

The man stared down at the river,
Fear gripping his soul.
To follow Christ meant certain death.
But true life would overcome.
…And God smiled.

As the water rushed around me,
I felt new life begin.
It took me years to see God’s love,
Now I gave myself to Him.
…And God smiled.


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Joanne Sher 10/27/07
Lovely images of God's heart and yours. Delightful and poignant.
Verna Cole Mitchell 10/28/07
This is an absolutely beautiful poem The last verse was my favorite. I love the "And God smiled" repetition.
Peter Stone10/31/07
I loved the way the poem started with Jesus, then examined several others, and finally finished with yourself.
Beckie Stewart10/31/07
I really liked your poem as it showed the different aspects of baptism.
Jan Ackerson 10/31/07
I love the little boy holding his crayon still. How sweet!
Sara Harricharan 10/31/07
This is great! I liked it, especially with the title as the ongoing line throughout. It's so simple and beautiful. Well done! ^_^
Brenda Welc11/01/07
I love the feel of this piece. Great writing!
Anothervoice Sunstar11/01/07
Beautiful. FORM-I especially liked stanzas 1 and 6, where the second and fourth lines rhymed. TITLE-excellent;Heaven rejoices when we accept Jesus as Savior.