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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Christian Baptism (10/18/07)

TITLE: Buried Alive
By RuthAnn Cornelson


Heís dead now. I killed him.

I didnít know if I could, he was so much a part of me. I thought Iíd never be free. I was like a slave to him, always doing what he told me. As I got older he sometimes didnít even have to tell me. What he wanted had become what I wanted. It was like he and I were the same person.

Of course, I didnít ALWAYS want to do what he said. Sometimes I felt like resisting. Conscience, people said. ďDonít you have a conscience? Doesnít anything bother you?Ē ĎCourse it does. Well, it mostly used to, more and more it doesnít. You live a certain way long enough, and yeah, pretty soon you hardly notice that conscience thing.

Still, I see other people living different; living happy and free, caring about each other. I met a guy a while ago who seemed to really care about me, like he wanted me to be happy. The old man never really cared about me. The things that he told me would make me happy, didnít, but I felt like I couldnít break free of him. Maybe I didnít really want to.

This guy told me about another way, a completely different way. He knew someone who could help me but I had to want out. I had to want to be free. Itís weird how you can want something and not want it too; like youíre having a war with yourself.

The old man tried to stop me, always telling me I couldnít do it, I wouldnít make it, too many rules, Iíd never be happy. But when I hung out with this new guy and his friends I could tell that they were happy, even more than happy, a deep down happy. Joy, they called it.

In a weird way the ďrulesĒ they followed, the way they lived, only made them free-er because it kept them away from stuff that would suck them down and trap them. Anyway, mostly they didnít live by rules. Mostly they just didnít want to do anything that would hurt someone else or themselves either. So they stayed away from stuff that would to do that.

And they really loved each other so that if one of them did start getting sucked down they actually stopped and helped him out. Iíd never seen that before. It didnít seem like they gave up much for all they got.

Anyway, these guys introduced me to the man they said could help me break free. In fact, he would actually break me free. All I had to do was tell Him that I wanted Him to, that I wanted to live the new way. I struggled with it though. Getting rid of the old man would be hard.

I decided to do it. I told Him that I wanted to be free, that I wanted to follow the new way. And it was done. The old man is dead. Iím free! In a sense I didnít kill him but I made the decision that killed him. All thatís left now is the burying.

Burying the old guy is going to be a celebration. Everyone is going to know that I decided to be free, to follow the new way; that I chose death for the old man and new life for myself. I want the one who set me free to know that Iím proud to be called His and Iím going to say so in front of everyone: all my new friends, all my old friends, everyone who doesnít know the one who can set them free. Everyoneís going to know that I love Him, that Iím one of the ones He has set free.

ďKnowing this, that our old man is crucified with him, that the body of sin might be destroyed, that henceforth we should not serve sin.Ē

So, Iím going down to the river and bury the old man in a watery grave. Iím going to get into the water carrying his dead self with me. Iím going under with him, going to be buried alive, but heís the only one staying down, dead and gone. Iím rising up free and new because of the one who set me free.

ďTherefore we have been buried with Him through baptism into death, so that as Christ was raised from the dead through the glory of the Father, so we too might walk in newness of life.Ē
Romans 6:6 KJV
Romans 6:4 NASB

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Jan Ackerson 10/25/07
Extremely creative way to approach it, and you've done a marvelous job maintaining it throughout. Well done!
Seema Bagai 10/28/07
An excellent piece. I liked the approach you took with writing this.
Terry R A Eissfeldt 10/30/07
I liked this a lot - even though I knew where it was going it held my interest. Good job!
Joanne Sher 10/30/07
Great approach - the word choice is just right - I felt like I was right there in his head. Love the title too!
Lynda Schultz 10/31/07
I loved how you handled this. Very good.