The Official Writing Challenge
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10/25/07
I like this! You've made the baptism the climax, and written all of the falling action and a wonderful resolution. Cool way to structure a story.
Your story is excellent, and your last line is perfect.
10/30/07
I love the honesty of this piece, and I like the way you bring God's mercy and forgiveness to the forefront. Great story.
10/31/07
I like the line " I am a self-made loser" that was good. Good writing through out. I don't understand the freezing water though, that could really compromise a person's health.
I like this because of the positive difference it could make in the life of a reader: the hope you brought into this story. A person in the position of your MC, perhaps feeling themselves beyond hope, would be reminded of God's mercy and greatly encouraged.