The Official Writing Challenge
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10/26/07
Oh, I love, love, love the ending of this piece! You really "got" me!
10/27/07
Great dialog and discussion - sounded very realistic. I also LOVED the ending. Good stuff.
10/29/07
This would make a great children's story! I love the touch of humor inside and especially the patience of the teacher. Good job. My only note, is I think a word is missing in this sentence: "taunted Simon her." Her what? Her brother, I'm guessing. Good job! ^_^
10/30/07
Great story. I especially loved the line about waiting a half an hour. The surprise ending was delightful.
10/31/07
Cute story.