The Official Writing Challenge
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10/26/07
Very heartwarming to read, and written with great affection and tenderness.

There was an unnecessary apostrophe in a "Sunday's" at the beginning of one paragraph, and then the next paragraph begins with almost the same sentence. Just a little tweaking, in case you decide to send this one out.

I have a very tender spot in my heart for the physically impaired, and I loved reading this.
10/27/07
A beautiful story. Thank you for sharing it.
10/30/07
Lovely story.
10/31/07
A sweet story, needs tweaking in some areas. The narrator voice changes from observer to being in Brenda's head. Either it's from the narrators POV or from the character's POV. Overall good.