The Official Writing Challenge
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Pretty good theological discussion in an entertaining story. Great line - "You don’t wait for convenient times to be obedient." Something we need to hear more, and practice. Good ending :)
10/26/07
Good, sparse dialog, but the implications made me squirm.

Be careful of "its" and "it's".

I like these characters.
10/31/07
It's obvious you can write. I just wonder why, you and several others do not like to put a space in between dialogue and paragraphs. It makes it so much easier for the reader. Your word count will not be affected. Good story but it drifted and died at the end. Needs some type of conclusion about baptism or dying.