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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Christian Baptism (10/18/07)

TITLE: Baptism And Marriage (i)
By Amanda D'costa


Jane was crying. She had just got off the phone with Jack and was wondering where they had gone wrong. “All I want is for you to love me”, she had told him. “Why do you make it so hard for me to love you? Why is it that each time I talk to you I end up feeling miserable? Why is it that I am beginning to hate you? I am scared Jack”.

“Well, in that case there’s nothing much that I can do. I’ve done all I could. It’s hard to please a woman like you. It’s best we part our own different ways. If you want me to leave, I’ll do the needful.”

Jane hung up even before Jack could finish talking. Tears began to flow uncontrollably. She sat in her car, parked on the side of the road, with her windows rolled up. She was going through a phase of being very insecure. People told her that she was in the right, and that the problem with her being neglected for many years was his fault. He could not take her for granted. He could not leave her for long periods of time alone without the assurance of his love. He could not treat her like one of his accessories, discarding her when ever he felt the need to. Tears flowed as did the memories of the past many years, making her feel sick and heavy hearted. She could feel the strong ache inside. “Dear God, all I want is for him to love me”, she sobbed. “Have I not tried to be the wife he always wanted?”

“What ever happened to the love you shared for many years? How did you end up like this? Divorce him. Leave him. Pack your bags and fly away to another country where he will never find you, and start all over again afresh. There is always someone out there who will love you for who you are.” Voices played on her mind, advice from friends and well wishers. Was this what she wanted? Was this what her heart spoke to her? Why had she felt the absence of anointing? “Forget him and move on with life. After all your children have grown now and have moved out. And to think that he used to pray with you during those early years of your marriage! I’m sure it was all a farce”. She could hear the words of her best friend echo in her ears.

Sitting in her car she prayed for all it was worth, storming heaven’s gates, begging her Father God for his comfort and intervention. Her sobs eased, her heart soared, and her prayers took flight into raptures of praise and thanksgiving, opening her heart to remorse and forgiveness. Her wound stood open, filled with pus and pain. “I’m sorry Lord”, she prayed, “I’m sorry Lord. I hurt you in hurting him. I’m sorry. Forgive my Jack. Forgive me. We’re sorry Lord”. A peaceful silence enveloped her. She could almost hear her heart sing out loud “I stand in awe of You”. And then she felt His healing touch. Her Father God was healing her with the cleansing Blood of His Son Jesus and His Mighty Holy Spirit. She felt alive, she felt anew. What ever happened before didn’t seem to bother her anymore.

The phone rang.

“I’m sorry baby. I hurt you. I love you very much. Please forgive me. I have a strong urge to pray with you on the phone right now. I know you are hurting. I know you are in pain, but please pray with me Honey. I need to know you forgive me. I need to know that you love me and not hate me for the disgusting person that I am. I’m sorry baby. I love you Jane.”

I love you too Jack.

Arise and be baptized, and wash away your sins, calling on the name of the Lord.
Acts 22: 16 (The New King James Version)

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Jan Ackerson 10/26/07
A heartfelt piece.

Some transition is needed between the 3rd and 4th paragraph--as it is, it looks as though the 4th paragraph is God's response to her prayer, and I was quite puzzled.

A lot of people will be able to relate to this, and to rejoice in the hope at the end.
Joanne Sher 10/27/07
This made me ache - you did a wonderful job of putting that emotion right on the page for me to feel. Good writing!
c clemons10/31/07
Heartfelt indeed. Several wrong word placement like "part our own different ways" what about go our separate ways, "I'll do the needful" not sure what you meant there. "children have grown now" children are grown up or our children are grown. You slipped tenses several times, sometimes in the same sentence. Keep writing and learning that's what we all are here for.