The Official Writing Challenge
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10/26/07
Love the conversational tone.

Watch out for the differece between "there" and "their" in an early paragraph.

This was a pleasant, comfy read, like talking to an old friend.
10/27/07
Love the tone of this. Nice job!
I enjoyed this. The last two paragraphs seemed a tadbit repetitive of the same message.
10/30/07
Nice sentiment, I just wish it were in the water. Good writing skills though.