The Official Writing Challenge
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10/18/07
I like this little girl evangelist:) Very nice read and a fun time of fellowship!
Laury
10/18/07
I love that the clown AND the girl were drawn to the church. Delightful. Nice job with characterization.
10/19/07
Very sweet and cute story that gets the point across that fellowship can be an important way to show and tell the gospel message.
10/20/07
This just sums fellowship up:

“Why does your family go to church, Deanna?”

“Because we like to. It’s like a big, big family and we like to sing and pray and read the Bible.”

And there's noplace like home. Beautiful story!
10/23/07
The characters came to life in this piece and love the message...unique writing on topic.
10/23/07
Adorable--children will love this!

I caught a "remain" that should have been "remained", and all significant words in the title should be capitalized. Oh, and also, I think it should be "The Clown Who..."

This is written at absolutely the right level for the kiddoes--would make a great Sunday School story.
10/23/07
The innocence of children can be very appealing. Nice story.
10/23/07
Cute story. I loved your portrayal of the children, I felt like I was there at the party too!
10/23/07
Great story for kids and adults! I like how the breakdown of Binky's refusal to talk symbolized the breakdown of his refusal to find out more about why he wanted to stay at Christian events. Add a few application questions and I could see this in a children's devotional book.
10/23/07
I agree, super story fr all ages. Well done again, Chrissy. God bless.
10/24/07
This is charming. Its message is great for kids and adults alike. Well done.
10/24/07
I really enjoyed this way of sharing the way that true fellowship can impact the lives of others.
10/24/07
Very well drawn characterization with a great message
10/24/07
What a cute story! I usually do not think of clowns too much, but I loved the character of Binky! Especially when he did 'talk' after all. This was very fun to read, my only note is in a few places, for instance, if Deanna says "Mommy" I don't think she would refer to Sally's mother as "Mommy, can Sally's mother..." Kinda awkward, but doesn't really take away. Good job, Aunty Chrissy! ^_^
10/24/07
Look behind the mask and you see so many longing for the fellowship Binky expressed so well. Great story.
10/24/07
Children will love this. So I guess that makes me a child. Good job.
10/25/07
Generally good stuff, I can see quite a bit of hidden meaning with the clown and a greater dimension all the characters - in other words a lot of interesting things going on here. Really, quite interesting on many levels. Watch the speech tags.