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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Fellowship (among believers) (10/11/07)

TITLE: One Body Underground, Invisible, With Love and Justification For All


A dark figure hurried through the Roman patrolled streets of Jerusalem. The man wrapped his long coat tightly about him and pulled the hood down past his forehead. His body struggled against the wind, and he prayed he wouldn’t run into any more soldiers.

Nothing he did helped to repress the memory of what had happened earlier; the images lingered, and he shivered as he remembered.


“Binyamin ben Ari, open up! We have orders to search your shop...” Soldiers yelled and threatened to break down the door, just as Binyamin ran to open it.

“Out of the way, You!” A soldier used the hilt of his sword and shoved the young Jew with a force that sent him sprawling into several tables loaded with sacks of grain. The tables wobbled and tipped, spilling wheat, rye and barley across the floor.

Binyamin landed on his back. A blow to his head pulled a blanket of darkness across his eyes. Before he blacked out, he prayed for his wife and two young boys.

Later, when he regained consciousness, the shop was quiet. He gripped the edge of a table and pulled himself up, but his vision blurred, and he doubled over until the pain passed.

“Anna,” he called. “Samuel, Symeon...” Panic nearly overwhelmed him as he searched in vain for any sign of his family.

Dazed and confused, he bolted the door to his business, now sacked and lying in ruins, and hurried toward home.


The memory remained vivid as Binyamin touched the side of his head. Yeshua, he prayed, my family...I’ve never felt so alone and helpless... A sudden blast of cold air made him catch his breath, just as a hand grabbed his arm and drew him into an alley.

“Shhh, do not speak. Follow me.”

Binyamin swallowed to still the beating of his heart. The shadowy figure led him through a hidden doorway, where a hand grasped his other arm and guided him down a series of stone steps. They went through another door and into a dimly lit room.

“Abba!” Binyamin heard his wife shush Samuel. She held Symeon, and the three of them rushed into his waiting arms.

“What happened; how did you...?” He looked around at the unfamiliar faces smiling as they witnessed the happy reunion.

It was then he recognized the man who had found him in the street. Shimon reached out and embraced the new convert, “Binyamin, you are all right? I was on my way back to get you. Come, sit. You look pale.”

People parted to let the young man and his family through. Shimon told Binyamin how he and several other men had entered the back of his shop when the soldiers had arrived. They were able to rush his wife and children away and hide them just in time.

“You knew the soldiers were coming?”

Shimon nodded. “We look out for one another. Our love for Yeshua HaMashiach binds us together as one body with our Lord as the head. Each member has a function. You will understand this more as you fellowship with other believers.”

“But...how will I know where my family and I will fit in?”

Shimon’s eyes twinkled, “Some mysteries must be revealed by the Ruach HaKodesh; other things are much more obvious. You are a baker, are you not?”

Binyamin nodded.

“Then, my brother, I would say you will fit in very well with those of us who are hungry.”

Gentle laughter filled the room with warmth. He would have smiled with them, but the color drained from his face, and he staggered. Several men helped him to a bench. Anna lifted his hood and gasped at the sight of his wound.

In a matter of seconds, Binyamin’s head had been tended to, and he was given a little food, along with a warm drink. “Where are we?” he asked.

“In the home of David and Miryam,” Shimon answered. “Persecution from the Sanhedrin and the Romans has forced us into hiding. We meet in different homes for the breaking of bread, and as we learn about Yeshua, we learn how to meet one another’s needs as well.”

He motioned for the believers to gather round the young family, so new to the teachings of the Way.

“Now, let me introduce you to your brothers and sisters in the Lord. Tonight, we will pray together to restore your spirits. Tomorrow,” he grinned, “we will work together to restore your shop.”

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Verna Cole Mitchell 10/18/07
What a powerful historical fiction story you have created. I can see the characters come alive as they demonstrate their love and dependence upon the Lord and upon each other. The suspense is just right.
Joanne Sher 10/18/07
Captivating story - I loved the "Jewishness" of this. (no surprise, considering my background) Your sense of place was just right, and the dialog is just great.
Linda Germain 10/18/07
Perfection~ Loved it.
Lynda Schultz 10/19/07
It's all be said already—this is great.
Dixie Phillips10/19/07
The only thing wrong with this story is that I want it to be book. This is so exciting! My head is just buzzing since I read it. Great job. Now... just go finish your novel so we can know more about your wonderful characters.
Laury Hubrich 10/20/07
This was very good. I, too, was wanting more.
Amanda D'costa10/21/07
Good work. Leaves me wanting more.
sarah rauch10/23/07
great setting - loved it!
David Butler10/23/07
Riveting story with a beautiful and heart-warming ending. You've got a really good grasp of the language and culture of the time - especially the use of Hebrew names.
I like the challenge of looking at the context to find the meaning of words from another culture. But there are some that would say "that's confusing the reader." I disagree with them, but that's a criticism I received when I did the same on one of my articles. I guess we can't please everybody, and I don't think we should try.
Great story - it should place, I think.
Dee Yoder 10/24/07
Excellent and suspenseful story. I love the characters and the setting you've created in this entry. I wish it were a whole book, too!
Loren T. Lowery10/24/07
The need for fellowship described to a perfect T.
Wonderful story telling and setting.
Betty Castleberry10/24/07
Good action, great message, this piece has it all. I felt as if I was there with them. In a word, wonderful.
william price10/24/07
And you didn't want to BRICK this, because why???????
This is top notch!!!!!
Anointed. The Lord's heart beats throughout. Do you type just two letters at a time in rhythm to his heart? Or does His heart beat faster the faster you type? Don't anti-brick again my fair maiden. You're a gift. God Bless.
Verna Cole Mitchell 10/25/07
Congratulations on placing. With your gift of writing and the way you use your talent for the Lord, you must surely place in His heart.
Sheri Gordon10/25/07
Congratulations on your 2nd place. This is a very compelling story -- and excellent writing, as always.
Beth LaBuff 10/27/07
Awesome entry AND your title is beyond description. I LOVE IT! Congratulations!
Janice Cartwright10/27/07
I really love this Mid, it just enveloped me from the beginning and held me captive in that long ago century when persecution drew Christian brothers and sisters together in a bond of love. Wonderful, wonderful story!!!!