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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Fellowship (among believers) (10/11/07)

TITLE: I Love the Smell of Coffee
By Peter Stone
10/15/07


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The strong wind pelted me with dirt and leaves, forcing me to lift my forearm to shield my eyes. Leaning forward, I pressed on. This weather would not deter me from reaching my destination.


"Hey, so glad you could come today. My name is Grant, I'm the pastor here."

I was surprised to find the minister greeting people at the door, "I'm Matthew. I heard about this place and thought I'd check it out."

"Thatís great! Oh, Andrew - come and meet Matthew, he's visiting us today."

ďNice to meet you, Matthew; how would you like to sit with me and my friends?Ē"

The lad led me to a row of seats near the front. A dozen youths greeted me with genuine warmth.



Reaching an intersection, I pulled my coat tight around my sparse frame, and waited for the lights to change. An endless stream of rejection scenarios fled through my mind as cars rushed past. How would they respond when they saw me again?


"Here's your coffee, dear," said Mrs. Simons. The home group meeting had just concluded.

"Thanks! I love the smell of coffee."

A hand touched my elbow, "Are you okay, Matthew? I noticed you frowning during the meeting."

I looked at Michelle, moved by her concern. She was a year older than I. "I'm going through a bit of a rough patch. You know, hard to make ends meet."

She slipped a twenty-dollar note into my hands, "It's not much, but I hope this helps."

"Thanks, I, ah, donít know what to say," I answered, feeling guilty. I had just stolen another hundred from a purse I lying on a table in the foyer.



The pedestrian light changed to green so I crossed quickly, chiding myself for my utter stupidity. I had been part of a community of loving people who cared for me and looked out for me, and I had repaid them with grief.


"Matthew, I'm, at a bit of a loss what to do. A year ago, you joined our church and gave your heart to Jesus. However, three witnesses have come to see me this week and have told me very disturbing things. Is there anything you would like to say?" said Pastor Grant.

"Look, ah, I've got a few problems, but dealing with them just didnít work out."

"Are you sorry that you did these things?"

ďWell, a little guilty, perhaps, but I really needed the money. I sort of regret taking the offering last week, and the money from the youth group's honesty box, and the money from some of the membersí purses. But I had no choice, you see, because I've got this bug about the pokies and I can't stop myself."

"Are you willing to receive prayer and counseling on this gambling addiction? Jesus can break those chains and set you free."

"Sorry, Pastor, but, ah, it's too much fun. The pokies are my life now."

"Then I'm afraid that there is only one thing I can do. I have to hand you over to Satan so that your old nature is destroyed and your spirit can be saved," he said sadly.



That was six months ago. Since then, my life had degenerated into a living nightmare. I lost my job, my girlfriend, and my family rejected me too. I had also developed agonizing stomach ulcers.

I saw that I had arrived at last, so I joined the others mounting the steps and made my way inside the church.

"Matthew, what is it that brings you here today?" said a welcoming voice.

"Oh, Pastor Grant, um, I've come to the realization that I need help. I want Jesus to set me free from those chains you told me about. Iíve made a complete mess of my life."

"Thatís excellent news, Matthew. Come and see me after the service, and we'll begin your counseling."

I thanked him and slunk like a dog with my tail between my legs to the back row.

A gentle hand touched my elbow and a familiar voice said, "Oh no you donít.Ē

My face burning, I turned to face Michelle. This was it; she was going to tell me to leave.

ďCome to the front and sit with Andrew, myself, and your other friends. We've missed you," she said, smiling.

"How can you say that? I stole money from so many of you. I stole from you, Michelle."

"But you have returned with repentance, I see.Ē She held out a hand. "So, are you coming?"


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Janice Cartwright10/18/07
You have painted a picture of a tough situation. As Christians we have to hold one another accountable, but we are also accountable to Christ to forgive and restore the repentant one.
Dee Yoder 10/19/07
This is how we should be with our brothers and sisters when they fall, but I wonder how often we're really like this. Good writing kept me involved in this story right from the first sentence.
Joanne Sher 10/20/07
What a story of repentance and acceptance. If every situation could end up this way. Wonderful.
LauraLee Shaw10/21/07
Your title drew me in being the coffee diva that I am! I was very moved by the forgiveness of this group of people.
Phyllis Inniss 10/22/07
A good story of repentance and forgiveness.
Donna Emery10/23/07
This was a good story and I love its real picture of a troubled man. I like the title and I like the concept of "tough love" shown by the pastor. Great work!
Jan Ackerson 10/23/07
Great structure with the flashbacks...very effective.

I think you could have ended it two sentences sooner, and let the reader draw the conclusions.

Grat job with this guy's internal voice, and I love the title. This is a strong entry.
Deborah Engle 10/23/07
This story made me sad because of similar situations in my family, but also reminded me that sometimes drastic measures are necessary before people are willing to repent. I like that Your MC made that choice.
Betty Castleberry10/24/07
This is a good story of true forgiveness and fellowship. Your young people set wonderful examples for the wayward flock member. Well done.
Joy Faire Stewart10/24/07
I like the way the MC was repentant and was forgiven. Excellent picture of our Father's forgiveness.
Sara Harricharan 10/24/07
Nice title and a good story. I like the little flashbacks and the MC's dialouge. My fave character was Michelle though-^_^ Good job!
Loren T. Lowery10/24/07
Good story and message - raw and real. I especially liked the way the MC was forgiven without prejudice. Also the fact that the pastor knew the best way to handle the situation with the MC when it was first presented to him. Not everyone would have the courage to do this.
George Parler 10/24/07
This a classic example of how many run from what they need most. Good job.
David Butler 10/26/07
Thank God for tough love. We all need it at some stage of our lives.
This story is a good way to teach some of the principles of church life. It's a hobby-horse of mine - the Power of the Narrative in teaching. Well done.
Perhaps a scripture reference for that bit about "... delivered to Satan for the destruction of the flesh..."? Not sure what's missing there. To newcomers it may be an unfamiliar and an alarming concept and practice.
Peter Stone10/26/07
Thanks Dave.
Here's the two scriptures that inspired this article:

1 Corinthians 5:5 Hand this man over to Satan, so that the sinful nature may be destroyed and his spirit saved on the day of the Lord.

1 Timothy 1:20 Among them are Hymenaeus and Alexander, whom I have handed over to Satan to be taught not to blaspheme.
Kristen Hester10/26/07
I really enjoyed this. I like the flashback format. It was very effective. This is a very creative entry for fellowship. You showed true Christian fellowship can include tough love.

Great entry for your last one in advanced. Welcome to masters!