The Official Writing Challenge
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10/11/07
I really enjoyed this story!!
Wonderfully realistic dialogue and portrayal of the boys punching each other as they played, ignoring the new kid, etc. I could hear and see it all as though I were there!

Great analogy drawn too between Josh's treatment of Derrick and his mom's treatment of God during worship.

The title also really sparked my curosity--wondered what a birthday party had to do with worship.

Great job!
10/12/07
Excellent way to drive home the point. Good job.
10/13/07
This was a great story. I loved your analogy. Very creative...
Laury
10/17/07
You took an interesting path to this topic and it definitely kept me following along. I like your analogy, also. The boy's characters are distinct and normal for teens, and I like the gentle reminder to worship God fully.
10/17/07
I love the idea of worship-as-a-party. Very clever!
10/17/07
Good message woven within a great story. Good job.
10/17/07
What a great lesson, told in a very compelling manner. Enjoyed this very much!