The Official Writing Challenge
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09/20/07
Yes! There's "just something about that Name"...Jesus, Jesus, Jesus! What a wonderful story! Thanks for sharing it. Written well, I might add...and an interesting and exciting read.
09/20/07
I found myself holding my breath as the enemy approached. The descriptions are so vivid. Excellent writing.
09/20/07
Battle stories keep reminding us of the atrocities of war. The ability of some of our soldiers is unbelieveable. They are such heroes.
09/20/07
A wonderful entry. I love stories about World War II. And I think that this is a perfect fit for "Calm".
09/21/07
Oh my, the horror of what he had to endure. I could feel and see the scenes you so vividly describe in this entry. What a wonderful, wonderful hero he was. To think, his story is but one among many stories in all the wars we've struggled through. Your entry is the epitome of calm.
09/24/07
Powerful piece, all the more so given that it actually happened. I do think that your writing lets you down in a few places. Many of your verbs are excellent but you still used the word ‘got’ three times when a more descriptive verb would have been preferable. Moreover the sentence “There was no way to jump ... in a dirty ravine” was clumsy, difficult to read in one go, and needs to be broken down into smaller pieces. But the rest is excellent: I love the German snorting, the knife being yanked, the pain ricocheting – all well chosen and very expressive
09/24/07
WOW. I could feel the tension - and to know this is true is even more amazing. Excellent, EXCELLENT writing.
09/25/07
This is an incredible story. Your writing is very good. I was in the scene -- my heart racing with the tension. Good job.