The Official Writing Challenge
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09/20/07
This is just lovely. The prayers are especially poignant. You have a wonderful sense of atmosphere here.
09/20/07
Love the deepness of this story, and you've written some beautiful words. I like how you stated that serenity found him, instead of the other way around. Great descriptions of what Paul was experiencing.
09/22/07
I really enjoyed reading this! Great use of vivid, descriptive verbs such as "fumbled" and "molded his body" made Paul come alive as someone I could see and even feel with, as though I were right there. Great dialogue, too--I especially liked the guy on the ship saying, "Rats everywhere. Some as big as dogs."

The unusual title also sparked my curiosity and drew me in. Great job!
09/22/07
I love a good quality retelling and interpretation of a familiar Bible character, and this one. Your story drew me onto the ship with Paul and the others. I enjoyed reading this.
09/24/07
I love your little details--the fig, the captains' exaggeration--things like that elevate your writing above the rest.
09/26/07
Wonderful details that gave your story life and breath. Loved this glimpse into Paul's life and what might have happened. The whole journey feels God breathed. Lovely.