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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Calm (emotionally) (09/13/07)

TITLE: Whispers of the Dawn
By
09/18/07


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Gentle raindrops drizzle down,
Splashing into pond and streams.
Morning freshness all around-
Spirit, wake from earthly dreams.

Robins greet the tranquil dawn-
Sun-kissed roses drip with dew-
Crickets sing and daisies yawn-
Light reveals this daily view.

Morning come with restful calm,
Gentle whispers of the dawn;
Touch me with His healing balm,
Former days and troubles gone.

Stillness comes from deep within,
Peace and wonder fill this hour
Praise and glory to begin-
Lord, please fill me with your power.

Breathe new life into my soul,
Fill my needs with your embrace.
Every day you make me whole
With the knowledge of your grace.

Peaceful moments with my Lord,
Calmness flows within my veins;
Nature sings in sweet accord,
While His presence still remains.

Sunrays change to pastel hues,
Breathing in your gentle peace.
Stillness of the dawn infuse,
Your great power to release.

Solace comes in daily prayer-
Quiet dawn, my favorite hour.
Wonders of His love declare,
Daily blessings to empower.


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Joanne Sher 09/20/07
I especially love the nature imagery - particularly the first two stanzas. Wonderful word choice especially. Felt right on rhyme and meter-wise. Flowed nicely. All I could find error-wise was one subject-verb combo that didn't agree. Wonderful (and I'll miss these!)
Dee Yoder 09/20/07
Beautiful and lovely. The rhythm flows well, and there's a feeling of serenity which matches the dawn subject. Wonderful!
Becky Depp 09/20/07
I love this poem, and it fits the topic. I felt a sense of peace and calmness while reading it.

Some may find the alternation of rhyming between 1st line and 3rd line in the second stanza and then the 2and line and 4th line in the first stanza etc. a little annoying but I actually like it and I think it makes it interesting.

Good Job, I love it!
Shari Armstrong 09/20/07
Can I have this in my back yard? Simply lovely!
Pat Guy 09/20/07
Many, many lines to love about this but here are my favorites ...

Stillness comes from deep within,
Peace and wonder fill this hour
Praise and glory to begin-
Lord, please fill me with your power.

Breathe new life into my soul,
Fill my needs with your embrace.
Every day you make me whole
With the knowledge of your grace.

Pure poetry - so, so lovely.
Kate Grey09/20/07
Lovely poem, filled with joy and calm. I like the lilting meter, and the progression from enjoying nature to worshipping God.
Jesus Puppy 09/20/07
Very well done, love the imagery bundled up in this. Though most rhyming would seem forced you have done so quite well. Good job.
David Ian09/20/07
Beautiful imagery and a very sweet, sweet moment shared here. I'm there, with you, both physically and spiritually. A VERY nice set of verse. Well done. Ghengis Khan liked it, too. ;^)
Amy Michelle Wiley 09/20/07
Beautiful poem. This is one of my favorites.
Valora Otis09/20/07
I know you always want to critique a piece so that the author can continue to improve. But how do you criticize something that speaks to your soul. Or a piece of writing that reminds you of the lovliest morning of your life? I pray you continue to share the blessings of your gift of poetry with the world--and of course with your friends here at Faith Writers.
Laurie Glass09/20/07
What a beautiful poem. I love how it flows. And it does indeed fit the topic because it brings a calmness over me when I read it. Wonderful imagery.
Debbie Roome 09/20/07
I felt so relaxed after reading this. Lovely word pictures.
Donna Emery09/20/07
This poem is as fresh and gentle as watcing a sunrise. I felt like I stepped into a moment of suspended calm; it expressed the mood of the topic perfectly. Very well done!
Thomas Kittrell09/20/07
I think I will just agree with Pat Dye. This is lovely. I saw a place where the subject/verb might not agree, but overall all it is great.
Thomas
Thomas Kittrell09/20/07
Excuse me, I meant Pat Guy. Very sorry.
Thomas
Esther Gellert09/20/07
This is definetely "on topic". It leaves the reader with such a sense of peace and calm, and also hope and promise. It's beautiful. I love it.
Laury Hubrich 09/20/07
Love this nice, calm poem. Very relaxing.
Laury
Seema Bagai 09/20/07
Beautifully written with well-chosen images. I felt calmness infused in each stanza.
MIRIAM JACOB09/21/07
Chrissie, your poem is so lovely that it melts my heart. It brings the soft, gentle, soul-refreshing beauty of Nature to me, and reminds me afresh of God's Wonders in Creation. Thank you for crafting this wonderful, inspiring beauty into divine Poetry. God bless you, my friend. Love always, Miriam.
Catrina Bradley 09/21/07
I'm SO glad I chose to read this before I started my day! What a blessing you have given me this morning. So peaceful, refreshing, and encouraging, all at the same time. Lovely, natural rhyme and rhythm - this just flows in my soul. :) Cat
Suzanne R09/21/07
You've painted a beautiful picture here. It so aptly sums up the idea of 'calm'.
Kenn Allan09/21/07
I love this poem - it flows easily as a country sunrise. Great imagery and "feel."
Jan Ackerson 09/22/07
Very pretty! I love the image of daisies yawning--so many pretty things in this absolutely sweet and calming verse.
Allison Egley 09/22/07
This is really good. The meter and rhyme are perfect. Even the last lines of each stanza make their own sentence/poem! Great job.
Sharlyn Guthrie09/22/07
This is simply breathtaking! Rhyme and meter are perfect, and this adds to the physical and spiritual serenity you so expertly describe in your poem. Nice job!
Al Boyce09/24/07
Beautiful imagery and a wonderful, peaceful tone throughout.
God bless
Al
Betty Castleberry09/24/07
Beautiful imagery. Very soothing and calming. This is extra nice.
Rhonda Clark 09/24/07
I love this. I love all your work. I wish my days would start this way.

I really liked the yawning image of the daisy and the dew kissed roses. Morning is my favorite time to clip my roses, so I often get filled with that dew.
Joy Faire Stewart09/26/07
You have a master's touch with words...so beautiful, vivid descriptions, lyrical; what more can be said?
Sara Harricharan 09/26/07
So beautiful, Aunt Chrissy! ^_^ Just reading this has slowed my hectic day a few paces. The imagery, the words-fit so perfectly. Awesome writing! ^_^
Loren T. Lowery09/26/07
What a beautiful way to begin each day and your sharing it with your words and talent causes God to nod his head and brightens us all.
Carol Wiley10/11/07
Absolutely Beautiful Chrissy!
Linda Wright10/01/09
Simply lovely! Thanks for sharing this beautiful poem. Linda