The Official Writing Challenge
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09/21/07
This was really good. I loved the contrast you painted between the old man and the rest of the crew.

When you say "If the ship has broken, he had no hope." "has broken" should be "broke." But that's the only thing I noticed.

Great job. I love how at the end he revealed the Light he saw. Great job.