The Official Writing Challenge
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09/20/07
This is beautiful. I feel so relaxed after reading this. Your descriptions are wonderful -- putting me right in the scene. Excellent writing.
09/20/07
Comforting piece; it reminds us that we all are promised "do-overs" by our Lord. Thank Him for that!
09/20/07
So captivating! I thoroughly enjoyed your descriptions.

I will admit to being confused by the age of the woman - at first I thought she was a child, then a REALLY old woman, before it all settled into place. Watch your use of the word 'and' in the first few paragraphs. It became distracting after a time.

Other than that I found myself picturing everything with such clarity. What an extraordinary gift you have.
09/21/07
Your descriptions are absolutely excellent. You painted a very VERY vivid picture in my mind.
09/22/07
Such lovely, peaceful images. I enjoyed reading this very much.
09/25/07
The imagery you put before us led me into the story. There is a depth to your words that the simplicity seems to hide. You are profound in your thoughts.
09/28/07
This was one of my favorites for the lovely imagery, as well as the message. Excellent writing