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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Surprised (09/06/07)

TITLE: Wait and Watch
By Karen Treharne


Trees whispering and brooks babbling. Clear-colored stones vibrating in a brook-bed as transparent fish swim by making rippling sounds. A rhubarb-red sky that begins our day. The mossy scent of earth before a thunderstorm rising up to greet us. A sparrow writing on our window sill with its dewy feet.

God will surprise us, if we will but wait and watch.

Rainfall in April that causes tears to fall from a weeping willow. Sitting on a riverbank where sunbeams slant beside us while at the same time on the other side Ö raindrops fall. Smooth rock faces along the shore that have been honed by winter gales over many years. The sight of a thirsty mouse lapping at the river's edge. An immobile mountain standing alone.

A hazy, ponded-moon in the water broken again and again by a bungling black frog, and a floating heron picking at it until it shatters. After moon-viewing, seeing our comparable shadow walking along beside us; hearing a cricket burglar searching for midnight treasures. An isolated place to feel the almost tangible sense of tradition that hangs in the quiet night air.

God will surprise us, if we will but wait and watch.

Eyes stinging from blowing sand and blinded by the glaring sun bouncing off the ocean waves. Heat waves drifting down on burning rocks. A day that is cool and clear, graced with a transparent-blue sky and a warm, caressing wind. A firefly leaving air in our fingers as we touch its lightness, then pulsing itself, spreading its wings, and with a tiny whir lifting into the air and floating up and away. Children devouring ice cream faster than grasshoppers.

Reddish-brown hills, barren as if they had recently been groomed; shaven clean; smooth like a Dachshund. A streak of lightning that shatters raindrops into dazzling diamond waterfalls. An understanding heart that listens - instead of trying to say or do something.

God will surprise us, if we will but wait and watch.

Snow falling softly as if each sowflake was being carefully laid in place, stacking up on fence posts and leafless branches; fallen leaves making a carpet of brilliant colors painted with a crusty tint of white.
A humming bird glittering green in the morning sun, probing with her long bill at a wrinkled mushy apple still clinging to one gnarled snow-dusted tree limb. Soaking up the perfect stillness and solitude of a first snowfall.

The setting sun that as it sinks out of sight, casts a final blazing light through the chestnut trees making the spring grass look deep and soft as emerald velvet. The rising moon, a big lopsided gold orb sailing up out of the cradle of stars, shedding its borrowed radiance over the sky and turning a summersault on a lake before it floats away.

Feeling Godís hand upon our heart as a surgeon would massage a transplant to life, replacing its emptiness with anticipation of Godís next surprise.

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Sherry Wendling09/13/07
How masterful you are at painting with words! Your ear is tuned to the entire creation; I felt the wonders all over again. For highest impact, you might begin your final thought with a noun instead of a verb, and develop it to match the poetic flow of the other paragraphs. A wonderful lesson: He is truly a God of surprises, and this gorgeous piece brought me a marvelous sense of nearness to my Creator!
Dianne Janak09/13/07
How beautiful this was.. the imagery got me thinking about how much we miss with our too busy lives and our information overload living... God is indeed full of surprises if we just watch and wait... thanks so much for this!
Sheri Gordon09/14/07
This is absolutely beautiful. Your words paint a magnificent picture. Wonderful writing.
Dee Yoder 09/14/07
When we were children, we lay on our bellies and viewed the world through a slow motion camera, but now, we whiz past everything in nature that surrounds us! Thanks for reminding me to slow down and zero in on something that is naturally fantastic and hand crafted by my Creator!
Marita Vandertogt09/15/07
Nice format... and I love the "rhubarb red sky" - perfect description!!
Joanne Sher 09/15/07
This is masterfully wonderful and descriptive. Gorgeous and perfect in every way. A favorite so far!
Verna Cole Mitchell 09/15/07
Every word is just right to make this beautiful poetic prose. Your descriptions are masterful. This is a wonderful entry.
Betty Castleberry09/15/07
This is beautiful. I'm at a loss for other words, except excellent.
Sharlyn Guthrie09/15/07
Vivid images came to life through these poetic lines. Thanks for the surprises.
Loren T. Lowery09/18/07
This is beautifully done and I could easily get lost in its magic. My article very closely parrallels yours this week; I liked your approach to the subject.