The Official Writing Challenge
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09/16/07
Very nice testimony!

Be careful of redundancies--your first paragraph could be considerably tightened up. Another thing to re-work is cliches--your title, for example, and the phrase "a dream come true" come to mind. If you've heard the phrase before, others have too, and you want to find a fresher way to write it.

I wish more companies had your company's slogan--it'd sure be a nicer world, wouldn't it?
09/17/07
Congratulations for having the right priorities and for depending on the Lord to be by your side in your business! Good story about how to have a business and a family,and honor God, too.