The Official Writing Challenge
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09/13/07
Oh, a happy ending! I'm so glad. The mom's voice is really masterful. That sentence about hearing her son's feet skipping overhead while she did laundry really wrenched my heart! This story is beautifully told.
Ah, what a lovely surprise! You did such a good job of pulling me into the story that I forgot the topic and I really was surprised at the ending.
09/15/07
Beautiful and tender - and the perfect title. What a wonderful surprise - and a lovely entry!
This is a priceless story--so tender--so well written.
I can't even imagine how wonderful that surprise would be to a grieving mother. Great job!
The best surprise in the world! I love the last line. This is well written. Kudos.
To be honest, when I first "heard" the doorbell I was anticipating and entirely different visitor, but was relieved to see her son ahd returned home to make angels in the snow.
09/17/07
You really got into Mary's heart--nice job with that.

I found it just a tad implausible that no one could get through with the news that he was found, and was coming home...presumably, that would be a process of several weeks. I could be wrong about that, and it's the only niggle I have about this tenderhearted piece.
Wonderful surprise! I liked the reference to snow angels. This is well written.
09/19/07
Hurray -- a happy ending! Snow angels and first snow...I like this thought and then your reference back to snow angel's at the end. I enjoyed your story.