The Official Writing Challenge
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09/13/07
What a cute and fun story about this electrical appliance. I love this sentence "I started to smell the wafting yeast while a few of my taste buds longingly were raising their heads."

--You've whetted my appetite - I think I'm going to get my breadmaker out. :)
09/16/07
I really like your wry writing style--quite a few really good lines in this entry.

I'm not sure the word "magnanimous" can apply to a bread machine--perhaps you meant something different? And there were a few minor formatting nitpicks; for greater impact at the beginning, you might start right off with your first paragraph, for example, and be sure to remove your name from the middle.

Nickpicking aside, this is a very strong entry, and I enjoyed it a great deal--your voice is simply marvelous.
09/20/07
A fun read, only a few hard to read sentences that slightly impeded the flow. Also Surprize? I checked the dictionary only one spelling in the American dictionary and that is "surprise."