The Official Writing Challenge
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09/13/07
Oh, oh, oh, I want Vex on my team!!! Okay, the other two can come too! Very exciting stuff here and so well written!
09/13/07
A lot of action and suspense, along with the surprise at the end.
09/14/07
Loved the way the suspense built. Good job all around. Welcome to the puppy pen.
09/16/07
Oooh, I recognize your writing style, so distinctive and utterly unique!

I envy people who can conceptualize whole alternate realities and convey them in so few words, as you have done here.

If pressed to give a critique, I'd mention the same hyphenation issue as I did last week, but I fully recognize now that they are part of what makes you stand out and above the crowd.

Nice job!
09/18/07
Hmmm, very interesting! I'm not real sure how I feel about the ending, but I enjoyed the rest of it. Good job. As for the hyphen issue, I see why you used some of them, but I couldn't see a reason for some. Anyway, like I said, it was a good story! :-)
09/18/07
Wow. I love the action and the characters. I couldn't stop reading. As for the hyphens, I have a tendency toward their use, too. I try to curb it, but I still want to use them! It seems natural in dialog to use hyphens sometimes.
09/18/07
Oh! Chills! I usually don't like anything even close to sci-fi or even high tech, but there was NO way I could stop reading!! Great job! I loved it. :-)
09/18/07
Amazing atmosphere. I was absolutely engaged.
09/19/07
Well done action packed story! Great writing, you sure poured your heart into this one! Great job!
09/22/07
Science fiction is not my genre, but this is very well written and easy to understand what is going on.
09/24/07
Hey Frank. When you said "I just MAY have crossed the zero-violence threshold" in the anit-mustard cutting excuse thread I couldn't resist reading your entry. You know, the whole can't look away from a car wreck syndrome.

I knew your writing was top notch (I can see why you've had success) but I have to admit I had to read it twice to "get it". This is nothing you did. I have four kids and they are slowly sucking my brain cells away. And I didn't have that many to spare.

On the second careful reading I not only "got it", I really enjoyed it. One reason I liked it is because this is the type of thing my son would love.

Thanks for writing this. We need all types of Christian writing. It's a blessing.