The Official Writing Challenge
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Thomas is such a sweetheart!
You captured the season and Liz's mood so well that I could smell Autumn. :-) I enjoyed their role playing--it went well with the carriage ride. :-) Good job. Hugs!
What a wonderful surprise. I feel confident that Thomas will indeed find the love of the Savior.
This story needs a sequel, because I really want this wonderful man to come to faith. Good descriptions, and the playful language was fun. Suggestion: Remember to use quotation marks even for thoughts (first paragraph).
Interesting turnaround from crime/intrigue (?) to romance. That was certainly a surprise. I even wondered if he was going to pop the question. Nice feel about this one.
I'm not so sure that thoughts must always be put in quotes though. That seems to change the dynamics of the story a bit. A focussed thought maybe, but the passing thought she had seemed appropriate to leave in the narrative unquoted. I may be wrong.
What an endearing story you gave us with this entry. I really liked it.