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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Surprised (09/06/07)

TITLE: Memories Like a String of Pearls
By Dee Yoder
09/08/07


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The trombones slid over the notes the Glenn Miller band had made famous, and the sweet cool air carried the tune across the lake where David and I walked. He guided me to a bench where the moon shone down like a spotlight.

I fingered the soft pearls on the necklace David had given me for graduation.

“When do you leave?” I asked softly.

“Day after tomorrow. I’ve got to be at the depot by 7:00. We’ll take the train to Fort Bragg from there.”


His deep, chocolate brown eyes met mine, and he looked at me so intently, I could hardly stand to look back. He took my hand and slowly kissed the back of it. I saw him smile as he pulled his lips away.

“I plan to marry you in two years, Katherine,” he said quietly.

“I know.”

“And I plan on coming to visit at Christmas if I get my leave,” he continued.

“Even if you have to hitch-hike, right?” I laughed.

“You know it, Kathy.”

I turned my head toward the pavilion. The band was playing String of Pearls, * and through the windows, I could see our friends inside, swinging to the tempo. David tapped his foot in time to the music and suddenly pulled me up. We danced the song out and then laughed at our silliness as we headed back to join the others.

Later, upstairs in my bedroom, I sat by the window that overlooked our front yard. The breeze billowed the voile curtains against my cheeks, and the late summer crickets chirped a tune in the night. My Bible lay open in my lap, but I hadn’t read it. I was thinking about my life and what it would be like being married to David. I could imagine our little house with a fence, maybe an apple orchard, two children, and David.

My plans made me smile, but when I remembered where he was headed, my smile faltered. I opened my Bible to the Psalms and read the chapters, one after another until I could barely see the words any more. I went to sleep with tears drying on my cheeks and God’s promises resting in my heart.




“Hey, Kath!”

“David! Where’re you calling from?”

“You know I can’t tell you that, Fraulein,” he hinted with a laugh.

“I miss you, David”

“…miss you, too, Kath-“

“I can’t hear you, David…there’s too much static…”

“I said…you, too! I’ll be home for Christm…”

My heart sank when I realized the line had gone dead, but the surprise of hearing his voice, all the way from Germany, brought a smile to my lips.




Christmas was only two weeks away now, and I’d see him again. I helped my family string the lights on the tree while we listened to the news on the radio.

“Yesterday, heavy fighting along the Mosel River claimed many American lives,” the announcer intoned. Mother looked quickly at Daddy, and he got up and shut the radio off.

“I feel like Christmas carols tonight,” he said heartily. “Mother, why don’t you get the book out, and we’ll all sing together?”

That was just like dear Daddy, but my heart was aching.

That night, I poured my fears out to God. I begged Him to have mercy on David and me. “Don’t let it be David, God,” I cried.

The next few days, I shopped and baked as usual. The news from Germany grew bleaker, and I kept my Bible opened to Psalm 23. My family tried their best to cheer me, but I felt a desolation and sorrow that I couldn’t shake.

Christmas Eve came and we attended candlelight services with our neighbors and friends. The war that raged in Europe and the Pacific pulled our spirits down; the service was subdued. Two families were already grieving their sons, and I didn’t want to look at them. I couldn’t be reminded.

Fat lazy snowflakes fell as we walked home from church, and the lights shining from the houses along Main felt warm and inviting, but tears stung my eyes. When we came to our house, a uniformed man sat with his duffel bag on the front steps.

“David!” I cried as I ran to him.

He hugged me to his chest as his laugh covered my sorrow like a balm.

“Kath, Oh, Kath,” he whispered.





I’ll never forget that Christmas of 1943. It was the last time I saw my sweet David.

Word Count: 744


*String of Pearls, Words and Music by Eddie Le Lange and Jerry Gray, Recorded by Glenn Miller, 1942


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Rita Garcia09/13/07
WOW! What a sad yet beautiful story! Master writing all the way!!
Linda Germain 09/13/07
How precious. You drew me right into the era and the feelings. Human nature never changes and those same emotions certainly translate to the present. Excellent job (even though it made me cry)!
Verna Cole Mitchell 09/13/07
This is a wonderfully story, masterfully written from start to finish. I loved it.
Tracy Walshaw09/13/07
You did an incredible job! I cried at the end. Everything blended so well; description, feelings, setting, music we could "hear". We even got a picture of her father's sweet character in about sentence. Great writing!
Tracy Walshaw09/13/07
...in about one sentence. Bad grammar is my pet peeve!
Linda Watson Owen09/14/07
Oh! I am reeling from the blow at the end! You've brought me to tears. Absolutely exquisite prose. How do you do it? I felt like I was right there in her shoes. Beautiful!!
Sheri Gordon09/14/07
This is really good. Your writing is captivating -- pulling me into the story. I went through all the emotions with the MC -- and got tears at the end. Great storytelling.
Julie Arduini09/14/07
The title, the music, the nice pacing, the surprise---I was captivated by it all. This was like a movie, I could see it all play out. Excellent!
Jacquelyn Horne09/15/07
Bittersweet memories here.
Pat Guy 09/15/07
Great build up - so beautifully bittersweet and VERY well written.

You did a great job of taking us on such a sad journey.
Jan Ackerson 09/17/07
Oh, phooey! What a roller coaster ride this was, and the ending really made my throat swell up. Great job.
Betty Castleberry09/17/07
This is so moving. My dad sent my mom a telegram at Christmas time when he was in Germany. I thought about this all the way through. Their story had a happier ending.
You did a great job of holding my attention. Very well done.
Joanne Sher 09/17/07
I thought I knew what the surprise was - but of course, I was wrong. This tugged at my heart. You did an AMAZING job with the setting and the mood. Your descriptions are exquisite!
Beth LaBuff 09/17/07
Wonderful work on the setting. Your descriptions were so good I felt like I was watching it happen. Nice flow to your sad story, too. I loved your use of the song title. (I know this story played out many times during the WWII era.) Great work!
Loren T. Lowery 09/17/07
A roller coaster of emotions, hopes, dreams, fear, elation, tragedy. You marched us through them all marveously!
Julie Ruspoli09/17/07
NO! I wanted him to make it home to stay. Such a great job of describing your characters feelings. Even though it had a sad ending, their relationship was comforting along with her trust in God.
Sharlyn Guthrie 09/17/07
You strung me along with the romance of this story. the ending was so sad, but also reality for many. Your writing is excellent, as usual.
Janice Cartwright 09/18/07
Being a forties child myself I quickly picked up on the authenticity of the mood. A beautiful, touching story. Great writing!
Dianne Janak09/18/07
This was absolutely a breathtaking drama, that not only took us back to a time of our parents ( many of us) but a reminder of what many families are suffering today. Thanks for this. Great writing...setting the mood with the song and the love story.. Made me sad.
Patty Wysong09/18/07
Beautiful. I loved the detail. I hated the sad ending, but it's true to real life. Great job.
Brenda Welc09/19/07
Very eliquently written. This was a real down home story with a shocking ending. Loved it. Wanted more. Great job!
Joy Faire Stewart09/19/07
This is one of my favorite entries this week. Love this era. Beautifully written.
Pam Carlson-Hetland09/19/07
This is an incredibly well written, beautiful story. I agree with all comments above. Excellent writing.


   
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