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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Bold (emotionally) (08/30/07)

TITLE: Taking the Stand
By Kathy Bruins
08/31/07


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Liz stared boldly at the man on the stand. She wanted to choke Palke when he said that he was Judy’s lover. She would have nothing to do with his kind.

Dan was sitting near Liz, and could tell that she was having a hard time not reacting to the defendant. He put his hand on her arm to show her he cared. She looked up at him and smiled a little, then turned back to the witness stand.

The judge released Palke from the stand. His smug look dared Liz to stay in her seat. Liz knew it would soon be time for her to take the stand. Liz thought, He wants me to be scared of him, but he will find out that I will do everything in my power for him to be found guilty. He killed my sister…it’s time for judgment on his crime.

At the break, Dan took Liz to the café in the courthouse. “So how are you doing? Are you going to be okay going on the stand?”

Feeling a bit relieved just getting away from the intensity of the courtroom, Liz knew it didn’t matter how she felt, she had to do this. “Yes, I will be fine. I’ll be glad when this is all over, but I will make it through. I really needed this break,” she said as she rested her eyes a moment.

Liz started thinking about Thomas as her eyes were closed. She remembered his kiss from the other night. Now he was gone. In an effort to help her, he lost his life. Tears began to burn in her eyes. His body would probably never be found for the explosion in the building was so massive.

“I’m sorry for all you’re going through. It will all be over soon.” Dan was always so nice and caring, Liz thought. He was always there when I needed him. Every time some evil would befall me, there was ‘ol Dan to help.

Liz stopped breathing at that moment. She started replaying the incidents, and yes, Dan was always there…just at the perfect time. She began to feel very uneasy and knew she couldn’t let on what she was thinking. She had to play it cool.

“Is everything alright? You look like you just saw a ghost.” He watched her carefully.

“I'm fine. I’m just tired I guess.” Looking at her watch, Liz said, “Let’s go back to the courtroom. It’s almost time.”

Looking at his watch, Dan said, “I guess you’re right…it’s time.” They got up from the table, they walked towards the elevators. Before the elevator opened, Dan pulled a gun out with a silencer and jabbed it into Liz’s ribs. “Don’t make a sound, or it will be your last one.”

He shoved Liz into a backroom where no one was around. Keeping the gun pointed at her, he released her so she could face him. “You figured it out, didn’t you? That look on your face in the café…that wasn’t from being tired.”

Shaking inside, Liz stared at him in disbelief. “You were behind it all the time. I trusted you. What a fool I was!”

“Hey, don’t take it so hard. Unfortunately, you are the one that has to be out of the picture. I did grow fond of you, Liz.” He pointed the gun at her head, when suddenly a loud crash came through the door. The gun went off missing Liz as she dove over the lower boxes.

“Dawson, give it up!” It was Thomas’ voice, but how? Liz thought.

Dawson crashed through the boxes near Liz. Grabbing her hair, he pulled her up in front of him. “You better be careful where you’re shooting. Someone could get hurt. Now drop the gun.”

Frustrated, Thomas dropped the gun.

“Good…now kick it over to me.”

Thomas obeyed.

“Liz and I have to leave now. Please don’t try anything…I would hate to have to kill her now.” Dawson and Liz moved backwards towards the door. Liz saw a chance…her only chance, she was sure…to show what she learned in tae kwon do. She kicked his shin and elbowed his rib at the same time, dropped to the floor and grabbed a chain and whipped it across his face. The gun flew from his hand, and a shot rang out. Dan dropped to the ground…dead.

Thomas was helping her stand. Holding her tight, he whispered thanks to the Almighty God that Liz told him about.


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Marilyn Schnepp 09/07/07
Fearful & bold. Killed two topics with one story.
Janice Cartwright09/07/07
Whew! This is a real thriller. Good everything!
Virginia Gorg09/08/07
Interesting read but left me wondering about the sister - was Dan involved in her death somehow? Nicely done and just enough drama to be realistic.