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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Fearful (08/23/07)

TITLE: Nonsensical Noah
By Allison Egley
08/29/07


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"Hey Elam, take a look at this," Amari exclaimed.

"What is it?" Elam asked.

"Old man Noah. He's building something out of cypress wood. He says it's a ship of some sort."

"A ship? Oh, that's a laugh. What's Noah going to tell us next? That he's going to live in the ship?"

Noah walked up behind them. "Actually, yes."

"Oh, um... Hi, Noah! Lovely day today, isn't it?" Elam muttered embarrassedly.

"Yes. A lovely day for building my ship."

"Okay, Noah, I have to ask. Why are you building, of all things, a ship?" Amari inquired.

"Well, the Lord has told me to build it. He told me there was going to be a flood."

"Oh, that's right. I forgot. You have a connection with God, don't you?" Elam mocked, poking Amari in the ribs.

"Did you remember to ask God what a 'flood' was?" Amari chortled.

"Well, let's put two and two together, shall we?" Noah asked. "I'm building a ship. Ships move on water. The obvious conclusion then, would be that a flood has something to do with water."

"Riiight. Whatever, Noah. We'll let you go back to building your 'ship' to prepare for this 'flood,'" Elam exclaimed, while making quotation marks with his fingers. "Make sure you tell us what else God tells you with this 'special connection.'"

As Elam and Amari walked away laughing, Noah offered a simple prayer to God. "Father, let them see the truth before it's too late."

As the days went on, Noah continued to be the laughing stock of the civilized world. And the uncivilized world. "What has God told you to do now?" one jeered.

"To put two of every unclean animal, seven of every clean animal, and seven of all birds on the ark," Noah explained, ignoring the jeers. "I really would repent of your evil ways if I were you," he advised, pointed to his countdown sign. "Seven days until God brings judgement upon the earth!" the sign read.

Soon, the crowd made a sign of their own. Seven days until Noah is proven wrong.

"We'll see," Noah replied. "Or, rather, I'll see."

Seven days later, the crowd once again gathered as Noah and his family boarded the ark. "Bye, Noah! We'll miss you. NOT!" Amari replied, rousing the crowd. "Have all of you heard what's going to happen? The whole earth is going to be covered in water," He lamented, in mock terror. "Whatever are we going to do? Hey, Noah, just how will the earth be covered in water? Are the streams and rivers just going to rise up? Are they going to overflow?"

"Oooo, I've got it, Amari. Water is going to just fall from the sky!" Elam chimed in.

"Oh, that's a good one, Elam." Amari exclaimed, between the laughter. "We'll have so much fun laughing at you when you come out, Noah.

Noah shook his head in disgust as he stepped inside the ark. The door slammed shut as thunder ripped through air.

"What was that?" Amari cried, leaping into Elam's arms.

"It was just the door," Elam explained in disgust as he dropped Amari to the floor. Another peal of thunder shot across the darkening sky. "No it wasn't," Elam whimpered, as he cowered down beside his friend.

"Hey, stop spitting on me," Amari accused.

"It wasn't me!"

Frightened, Elam and Amari ran up to the ark and started banging on wood. "Uh, Noah, you know we were just kidding, right?" Amari chuckled.

"We didn't really mean all of that stuff we said," Elam agreed. "Come on, Noah. Let us in. Doesn't your God want you to love your neighbor?" They waited, as the rain began to fall harder. "Okay, Noah. This isn't funny anymore. We'll help you take care of the animals."

"Yeah. We'll even clean up the elephant droppings," Amari offered. "Please let us in," he pleaded.

The water was rising at an alarming rate. All around them Amari and Elam hear people screaming.

"Noah? Noah?" Amari and Elam continued to cry out to Noah, but they were greeted only by the sounds of the thunder and rain, Noah's silence, and the silence of God.

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Based on Genesis 6 and 7
Many people believe Noah's flood was the first time it rained on earth.
http://www.mtjuliet.org/sermons/archives/000887.html


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Loren T. Lowery08/30/07
Stories of Noah's Ark continues to be some of my favorites and yours fits well into that category. Noah certainly had to be a man of faith and conviction, qualities still as difficult to find today as it was then.
Sherry Wendling08/31/07
I devoured the whole piece. The mocking, almost humorous...Then,"Hey, stop spitting on me!"...I love that line. And the “countdown sign"--What a hoot! Great stuff--You really get the message across. And here we are, living in the generation that’s come full circle. “As it was in the days of Noah, so the coming of the Son of Man will be..."
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/31/07
I loved your modern retelling of this story. I smiled at "not." Do you suppose God did, too?
Rhonda Clark 09/01/07
Very, very cute. I could see the joksters begging to be let in.
Sharlyn Guthrie09/02/07
Telling this story from the scoffers' perspective put a whole new spin on it. I enjoyed the irony and the humor you included. The ending seemed a little rushed, but that word count will get you every time! Great job.
Joanne Sher 09/02/07
Loved how lighthearted this cautionary tale was. Cute! (and I think I may know who wrote this) I could see this as a skit - fun!
Jan Ackerson 09/03/07
Really clever--teens would like this, for its modern attitude and its snippy antagonists. Great fun!
Patty Wysong09/03/07
I loved the bantering between Elam and Amari-It made for a fun read, even though I knew the tragic outcome for them. I could see this as a cartoon strip. Good job! Hugs!!! :-)
Dee Yoder 09/04/07
Patty voiced my thoughts exactly-comic strip-so cool! The dialogue between the two scoffers is spot on for the personalities you created for them. Good writing. Very entertaining.
Jacquelyn Horne09/04/07
This was really good. It's so hard to imagine how things might have been in Noah's day. You made it very plain.
Sheri Gordon09/04/07
Very fun to read. I love the sarcastic humor. You did a great job with the dialogue.