The Official Writing Challenge
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08/31/07
Love the storytelling aspect of this, and the woman's authentic voice.

A few times I lost track of the speaker, and I got a little muddled in the flashback, too...maybe just a bit of tightening for clarity would help.

Your title is perfect, and this story has a very comfortable feel.
I really enjoyed sitting on the porch with you. The dialogue is so natural that it reminds me of conversations with my mom, who's now in heaven, and how I knew the end to all her stories. Great writing.
09/05/07
I found the dialog a little hard to follow in spots but overall the rambling chatter from an old lady was so realistic.
I love hearing the old stories. This is a good one.