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08/30/07
You took on a subject that could have been extremely objectionable. But writing metaphorically, saved you and the stories content. You led this reader through so many emotions. I felt like I was her--lying there, and I wept. This is a deeply spiritual experience, SHOCKING but spiritual. Finally, to have the officer feel the same way I did was VERY good writing!
08/30/07
This is very good. You made me feel all of the emotions. Your descriptions were wonderfully written. Nice job.
08/31/07
A vivid, beautifully-written story! All the pain, fear, and then joy come alive in it through the powerful descriptions. Great job!
08/31/07
Simply outstanding in every way!
09/01/07
Wow. You have NOTHING to be ashamed of, my friend. Your writing is evocative and beautifully descriptive. And such a powerful message. Excellent.
The last sentence was the perfect ending to this emotionally gripping story. In this powerful story, you managed a most difficult subject with finesse.
09/02/07
Yes! This DOES have it all!

You put us there on the scene and we experience so many emotions - well done and very well written.

Wow ...
09/02/07
Strictly "BLUE RIBBON!" What more can I say? It touched me to the depth of my being.
09/03/07
Touching, shocking, and, finally, hopeful. This is a powerful story with a message of hope for anyone who's gone through a terrible situation like this one. Great descriptive writing and characterization.
09/03/07
Well done. We often get so caught up in the details of a crime that we forget that Jesus uses them for good and can bring about miracles that seem foolish to the wise, eg, the horrible death of Jesus that is in fact the greatest miracle of all times.
So intense! I almost couldn't read it. So real. I would really like to know the MC's final plight. But a very good ending for the officer.
09/03/07
Wow! You know how to pull your readers in and keep them there. Excellent.
09/03/07
This is great. The miracle is wonderful. Fantastic.
09/05/07
Wow, excellent writing of a hard emotional subject. Good job.
This is an unforgetable, stunning piece of writing. So descriptive. Marvelous writing.
This piece took my breath away. You did such an awesome job writing this. WOW!
09/05/07
My favorite part, the moment between Hannah and the policeman, when her words provoke his tears. You are a very visual writer. I could see it all.
09/06/07
Top 40 ranking: 28th out of 200 entries

Level 3 entries: 12th
09/20/07
Wonderful description! I clung to every word - powerful verbs!! Excellent writing!