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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Fearful (08/23/07)

TITLE: When the Day of Evil Comes
By Dee Yoder
08/27/07


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“Honey, have you seen my blue t-shirt?”

“Which one do you mean?”

“The one with the black writing.”

“Oh, I think it’s in the laundry. I’ll throw it in the dryer after I finish painting this section in the bedroom.”

I pour the last smidgen of paint from the can into the tray, and with wide sweeps, I color the pale wall bright yellow. I step back and admire the transformation. I can hardly believe we are able to afford this house. Our dream to offer refuge to families in need will be fulfilled with this large Victorian home.

I clean up and head to the basement. The stairs are well lit as I start down the steps, but I suddenly have a sliver of apprehension scratch the back of my neck.

As I step onto the floor at the bottom of the stairs, I hear a noise coming from the far corner. I stop and lean out, trying to see around the support pole that’s blocking my view. I walk toward the sound I heard.

Suddenly, I hear a whisper behind me, not loud enough for me to make out the words, but strong enough that I whip around and stare open mouthed at the empty basement.

“Michael?”

Of course, he’s not down here with me, so he doesn’t answer, but something answers. It comes as many voices, soft, but insistent.

“We are legion.”

The hairs rise on my arms. I race across the basement, and fly up the steps at break-neck speed. My eyes are wide, and I’m so afraid, I feel like I’ll faint. I can barely think or keep myself from banging into the furniture in my path as I frantically make my way through the house, looking for Michael.

“Oh my Lord, my Lord!” I pray.

I find him in his study. He jumps up and his face grows white when he sees how panicked I am.

“What is it, Beth? What is it?”

“Michael! Oh, my word, Michael!” I collapse against him, and the trembling of my legs is visible.

As I relate what I heard in the basement, he raises his eyebrows and begins to move toward the door.

“No! You can’t go down there!”

“Beth, I have to see what you’re talking about! I have to check out the whole basement!”

I plead with him all the way through the hallway, into the kitchen, and at the door to the basement. He shakes me off and tells me to stay put. My teeth are chattering, and the trembling has increased to the point that I feel my body could literally shake apart, but I won’t consider leaving the top of the steps while Michael is down there.

The silence wells up from below, and I don’t hear Michael’s steps anymore. My heart is pounding so hard, that my chest hurts. I continue whispering my prayer to Jesus as I wait.

From below, Michael gives a short, sharp cry. He’s yells out a prayer, calling on the Lord to cover us with His blood and comes running full tilt up the steps. Like me, his eyes are wide with terror, and he pulls at my shirtsleeve frantically.

“Out, out, out!” he shouts.

Without a word, I turn and run to the kitchen door, and both of us clamber down the porch steps into the yard.

The day is bright with sunshine, the trees are fanning a soft breeze across our cheeks, and the terror we felt in our house seems out of place in this peaceful setting.

We stand and stare at the windows overlooking our yard. Finally, Michael takes my hand. He’s shaking, too.

“Beth, there’s something in there, and I think you know what I mean.”

“We can’t go back?”

He gives me a small smile, but his fear is still visible.

“We’ll gather our church family to pray with us. The peace and power of God will overcome Satan’s plan to cause us fear. We’ll claim this house for the Lord because He has called us to carry out His plan and He will protect us.”

I see the faith he has in Jesus, and my shivering begins to lessen.

For the first time since accepting Christ, I fully realize that my fight, as a believer, really is a struggle “against the powers of this dark world”. *


“Put on the full armor of God so that you can take your stand against the devil’s schemes. For our struggle is not against flesh and blood, but against the rulers, against the authorities, against the powers of this dark world and against the spiritual forces of evil in the heavenly realms. Therefore, put on the full armor of God, so that when the day of evil comes, you may be able to stand your ground, and after you have done everything, to stand.”

* Ephesians 6:12, The Holy Bible, New International Version
Word Count: 727


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Jan Ackerson 08/30/07
Wow, this one is REALLY scary! Very well-written, and the present tense really adds to the mood of immediate danger.
Sheri Gordon08/30/07
This is really good -- and really scary. Your writing had me right there in the house with them, and shaking with them. Great job.
Michael McBuba08/31/07
Highly enchanting and very gripping! At some point, I noticed that my heart was racing very frantically; and the matter of fact is that this write-up boldly underscores the fact that Satan and his demons are still very much real and active today, but even far more important is the truth that the power of God is readily available to totally silence and overcome them! Kudos for a job well done!
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/31/07
This is masterful writing. I was shaking all the way through with fear. Your writing is awesome.
Marilyn Schnepp 09/02/07
A very powerful and fearful story; but because there is no "same time/same station" tomorrow...this particular reader would've liked a full account of how the (I'm sure)"satisfactory" ending came about. Well written and very creative, however...and held my interest throughout.
Ann FitzHenry09/03/07
Oooo....scary. This entry is definitely fearful!
Sharlyn Guthrie 09/03/07
You have nailed the topic with this one! Oh my. My heart raced as I read it. The devil loves to instill fear in believers, expecially when they are interfering with his plans. Excellent writing!
Pat Guy 09/03/07
Oh my - I could barely read this because it was so scary.

Wow! You did a fanastic job all the way through. This truely defines fearful. (how about terror!)

Wow - this is scary.
Rhonda Clark 09/03/07
You've made me scared to go home. I'm reading and commenting on these as we travel back from a weekend away. Makes me wonder what I'm going to find at home. I'll pray before going in. :) I know people who have encountered the same thing.

You made and awesome, although scary, point. These things are real.

Julie Ruspoli09/03/07
Oh my, my heart is racing and I am so thankful I don't have a basement in this house. Very, very well written, but please tell us what happens. Great article.
Patty Wysong09/03/07
Oh, I STILL feel the chills running down my back (and that's NOT meant as a figure of speech!!!!) Very well written and the description made it oh-so-real. Very well done!! Hugs--and I need one after this one!
Joanne Sher 09/04/07
Oh, wow. Absolutely spine-tinglingly terrifying. You definitely had me shaking. Wow.
Jacquelyn Horne09/04/07
Very good account of the true forces of evil. But God has overcome evil. Good story.
Myrna Noyes09/05/07
Very intense and gripping story with a strong message! I have been in a similar situation and know the shock of fear. Excellent writing! I wish there was a sequel! :)
Sherrie Jackson09/05/07
Wow! Now this is different! I was wondering how your title would play out. VERY scary stuff, and once again fantastic writing. Excellent job!!!
LaNaye Perkins09/05/07
This made the hair stand up on the back of my neck! WOW, what an awesome job you have done in the telling of this! Bravo!
Betty Castleberry09/05/07
This is very Amityville like. Great job of scaring this granny. Kudos for a well told tale.
c clemons09/06/07
Good job Dee, this could be expanded and published. It is as good as anything secular out there and yours would show what Christians do when faced with evil.:)
Martha Ford09/06/07
Dee, such a wonderful story that the hair on my arms stood up also. We are currently moving into a new house (new to us) so I can relate to the strange feelings. Once again you seem to top yourself at every outing. God Bless. M.
Edy T Johnson 09/06/07
Wow, this really is a "fearful" entry! You certainly know how to make your characters come alive and put us right in their shoes. I've had similar feelings in new/strange places, but never heard a voice like that. This is a winner in my book, great writing. Is this pure fiction? Or, did you personally experience such an event? I'm glad I came looking to thank you for leaving a comment on my "confused" entry. I appreciated it and I appreciate finding your story.


   
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