The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a most interesting story. The verses of the song interspersed among the narrative fit very well. The story is well written with a great message.
09/01/07
Great description - and I also loved the touch of the songs interspersed. Great ending too.
09/02/07
Your entry illustrates how we often wait for trouble to come before we call on the Lord for help. It's a good thing He is faithful to answer our cries for help, even though we may have not been faithful to Him in our Christian walk. I could empathize with this character.
09/04/07
Your writing is quite engaging ... but I want to keep reading. What happens to her? What was in the package? What did her client do? I know that's all irrelevant to the message of your story ... but I want to know the rest. :)

Very good writing.
09/05/07
I was very intrigued with this piece. I would like to have read more in this but even with the word cap it was still wonderful. Good job.
I liked the MC's strong personality, as well as the timeliness of this piece. Great job!!
09/05/07
OK. What I didn't like about your entry was that it read too much like a novel and I wanted to read more! It was almost like a movie trailer...bits and pieces of the story revealed. 750 words isn't nearly enough for this. I'd love for you to develop it into a longer version. Good stuff!
I also found myself wishing you had more than 750 words to tell this story. I would have loved to have read more!
Intriguing. Like others have said, I wanted to read more.
This was very well written.
09/05/07
What I particularly loved about this was the verses from hymns--this may be heretical, but there have been many hymns that have moved me as much as Scripture does. Your portagonist, it appears, felt the same way. Wonderful!
09/05/07
Great writing and thanks for the hyms now in my head--I can sleep peacefully! Keep up the great writing, this really held my interest because I was curious about what was happening. Be Blessed!
Frightening situation. God is always there for us. True, he doesn't pass us by.