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08/23/07
The title is perfect and you have woven it into your story so well. The last line is so meaningful to me — even in these terrible moments, we do need to stop and share the good things together. Beautifully done.
08/23/07
Oh, your last line is a beautiful ending to a beautiful story. The characters you created in this piece are so real. Even the glimpse of the husband and the son-in-law are sketched out in short sentences. Really lovely writing.
08/24/07
Loved the last line also and that you made the confused the same as the lucid. Not only profound, but my daughter is a nurse in a retirement home,and has gained more wisdom from the confused than I would have ever believed. There is always a spirit in there that does not die, even when the mind is going.
08/24/07
Perfect title. Perfect final line. Perfect dialog. This is just wonderful. (As usual, if I'm right about who this is!) Thank you for blessing us with this wonderful story.
08/24/07
This is lovely. Rose seems so real to me. She reminds me of my aunt who has Alzheimer's. Very nicely done.
08/25/07
This is a simply lovely story--so well written.
08/26/07
Beautiful. Simple beautiful.
08/26/07
This is so beautiful and tender. The daughter caring for the mother just as the mother cared for the daughter for so long. I loved this story. Thank you.
08/27/07
Caring for the forgetful is quite a task. You pictured this well.
08/28/07
A very touching story. Easy to read.
08/29/07
Very touching and emotional story on a very sad view of life. Nice job.
08/29/07
The storyline was truly intriguing and very powerfully engaging. I could't glance away even for a second! A great accomplishment and a remarkable feat.
08/29/07
So many pieces on Alzheimer's and Dementia this week (including mine). But yours is truly outstanding. What a realistic picture of these tragic diseases that ravage the mind. I was completely engrossed throughout. Wonderfully crafted. Truly Masters-worthy.
08/29/07
I also felt that you did an excellent job capturing Rose and her confusion. This was just beautiful.
08/29/07
I swear stories like yours should come with a warning box of kleenex somewhere!:) This was so sad I cried (and I thought after writing my fearful entry yesterday I had no more tears left)! This was very well written and true to the heart. You wrote this with such compassion. Great writing!
08/29/07
What a beautiful portrayal of a day in the life of caring for a parent with alzheimers. That's love in action.
08/29/07
Wonderful characterization, and the last two lines are just perfect. A lovely, lovely piece.
09/07/07
I can't believe you did it again! I was captured from beginning to end.Your writing is the absolute BEST.
09/22/07
Wonderful! You are one of my favorite authors--look forward to reading more and more and more!